Likhe Jo Khat Tujhe (review book)

• Glimmer Of Hope

Author: lost_soul7201

Reviewed by: KaynatK01
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Amplify (Cover):

The cover of your story wasn't some attractive type. Your story is vibrant, and the cover doesn't grab the attention of viewers. I would recommend you to change the cover in contrast to your story.

Crescendo (Blurb)

I have to agree your blurb was eyecatching one. But There's a slight mistake dear which I wanted to say, you portrayed dialogues of two different people, right? But when I read the blurb I was actually confused that are the two dialogues said by the same man? Because you have written the dialogue of her father and then directly the second dialogue just had "he said" so as a reader I got confused with that. You could have written "said a man in his 30's" or whatever you find appropriate!

Hook (Prologue)

So the main thing about the story is Prologue. And I found your prologue the best. To be honest, the way you showcase about Shiv and Shakti, I was thinking that this might be some mythological reincarnation type of story but, Hell No! When I completed your story I understood that your prologue said a lot about your story indirectly! (If shiva is the embodiment of physical strength then shakti can create and nurture life) My favourite lines from your story. I would also appreciate the hard work behind the thoughts you put on feminism. That made the prologue more attractive.

Accent (Title)

Here comes the most difficult task for any writer to put the best title of your story. And dear the title didn't match with your story. Well, see Glimmer of hope means a little bit of hope but your story wasn't about that. It was about the harsh reality of the society and according to me, the title would have been according to that.

Ballad (Plot)

The plot you chose was literally outstanding! I would really appreciate you for taking this big step and writing a story on it because mostly a writer fears to write on these kinds of stories because we are used to prince charming, Happy ending stories. But there you brought the realistic topic and I was blown off. It's the truth that how Men thinks woman as their toys whenever they are going through the pressure of work. I could feel when the female protagonist was narrating her story I actually had tears when she was going through physical pain! And exactly not all women are strong to fight back their husband and society,
There are some women like Adaysha who keep quiet for the sake of their parents and society and bear all this pain. It literally hurt me😢! The best thing you did in your story that you didn't keep this story as a happy ending where Adaysha would have forgiven Prateik because he was the man who should be given death, not forgiveness. Adaysha's death was better than to forgive her husband and make it a happy ending.
Sometimes these endings are more satisfying than the happy endings!

Ensemble ( Characters)

The character sketch was also something good.
It was relief that you didn't put your male protagonist as a womanizer as it's a stereotype to put a character like this as a womaniser but it was different.
You explained each and every character well in your character sketch and we got a view of how they would be!

Avant Grad ( Storyline)

The series of events that took place in your story was perfectly done.
On one side there's a daughter who is a princess in her father's kingdom but on the other side, she is treated as a slave in her husband's palace.
It was clearly stated and the best thing was your story started and ended on Raghav Bharadwaj.
In the end, he promised her daughter that he won't make his granddaughter as a princess but a queen that's the perfect dialogue you portrayed there.

Cantabile (Grammar)

You had a strong grammar throughout the story but there were a lot of mistakes in a character sketch.
In Adaysha's character, you said (A girl in his early twenties)
It should be "A girl in her early twenties"
Just small errors which you should change immediately.

Dolce (Reviewer's opinion)

Okay so getting it straight. I loved this story of yours very much.
The story had its own charm. I literally hated Pratik and his mom.
And one more thing I wanted to say, It was a really brave thing for you to write on this stuff. It wasn't a cliche happy go lucky story. But the reality of a woman which she faces every day. And till now man considers women as their object. You made me cry at some point and it has been ages since I had tears while reading stories.
In the end, I want to say you wrote very well!

Thank you,
Kaynat Khan
(Reviewer of FMC)

*****

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