Likhe Jo Khat Tujhe (review book)

• The Heavenly Hell

Author: _Lachuu__

Reviewer: amaya_kashaf

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Amplify (Cover)

Using volcanic eruption or lava fall *chuckles* in the cover to depict hell was a good choice, but I think you should use both light and dark background according to your title that would depict both hell and heaven at the same time.

Nandini is a happy go lucky girl who will be tortured by stone-hearted Manik, this is what I thought after analyzing your cover, but the case is little different in your story.

So in accordance with what I have read till now, a poker face of Nandini on the cover will suit more than her smiling face.

Accent (Title)

Honestly speaking the words you used for the title isn't uncommon but the way you used it made it extraordinary. The title truly persuaded me to click that 'read' button, and cherry on top it strongly suits your story.

Crescendo (Blurb)

When I read your blurb the first thing came in my mind was it will be either fantasy or paranormal story, but it wasn't *chuckles*

You used the figures of speech like Metonymy and Synecdoche (Correct me if I'm wrong) to enhance the flavour of your writing skills which I really appreciate, but does it suffice the need for a perfect blurb?

The answer is no.

In my opinion, you should add a bit more about both the protagonists or about the story maybe?

Hook (Prologue)

No prologue! Believe me after analyzing your title, cover, and blurb I did expect a prologue from you. So I'm a little disappointed here.

Before being a writer you are an ardent reader (Courtesy: Your bio *wink*) so as a reader, I'm sure if you choose any story to read you do expect a short preface or introduction at the starting to get the hint of the story to know where it will lead you.

So little hints through your prologue about the story with the help of future scenes will do great wor

The plot is definitely the unique one. Personally, I never can across a plot like this on watty since the time I have entered into this fictional world of watty. You deserve full points in this domain.

Ballad (Plot)

The plot is definitely the unique one. Personally, I never can across a plot like this on watty since the time I have entered into this fictional world of watty. You deserve full points in this domain.

Ensemble (Characters)

Your characters are really mysterious and I found that thing nail-bitingly intriguing in your story. *Chuckles* Whenever I felt that I deciphered any one of them, you would add something to the plot which makes them more mysterious, especially Manik.

Avant Grad (Storyline)

Your storyline is a blue diamond just like your plot. It's mysterious, hooking. The story has the capability to keep you on your toes. Your thoughts on the shadow thing really have my heart, the way you explained it did give me the insight of your personality, damn I feel the psychology student inside me is speaking, right now!

Jokes apart, your storyline is praiseworthy no doubt, but I was confused in some scenes.

For instance

Isn't Nandini admitted to the asylum? I'm sure she is, but then how come Natasha has the authority to decide what should Nandini be eating isn't that the task of assigned authorities of the hospital?

Also, does Mr Shrikant Malhotra works for the Yadavs or for the hospital?

And, how can Nandini come out of her cell so easily? She is a very special case for Yadavs so shouldn't she be kept under great surveillance?

Cantabile (Grammar)

I think you and I both know how strong and commendable your grammar and vocabulary are! I found no mistakes in your grammar or vocabulary in four chapters which I read.

Dolce (Opinion)

Rather than describing the scenes, I think you could mould it into conversations.

Amaya.K
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