Boarding House Of Madness

Rabi by DragonIcicleCrystal

(Edit from the future: This was meant to go in another book, and I didn't realise I put it here. Sorry guys!)

Name: Rabi

Age: 21

Gender: Male

Appearance: A green waddle dee that's green(split in the middle, lime and sea green) with rabbit ears and tail and his feet are black. Has a little tuff of hair on his line side and has pink eyes. Wearing a black top hat with yellow and light green scarf. Most the time has his wand on his back. That's a lot of green lol.

Personality: A mischievous guy who plays tricks and pranks on people from time to time. You probably have a lot more work to do with this character if that's all you have to say about their personality. This bit is usually one of the longer ones (not to mention more enjoyable for me to read than appearance).

Strengths: Jumping very high and is really fast. He has a ton of smoke bombs that uses for magic tricks or for fighting. He can spwan rabbits(only 10)out of his hat and sometimes they're killer rabbits if needed. Blast beams of sparkles from his wand(sometimes they hurt and sometimes they don't). Interesting choice of powers. I see many of them seem to be magic themed, which works.

Weaknesses: He not strong at all How is this possible if he can jump very high and run very fast? The muscles in at least his legs should be above average if his jumping and running abilities are above average. and can't really use weapons unless it's a wand. Can't really carry heavy things. He may be fast but needs breaks from time to time or he'll faint. Fire, sharp things, yeah...Also he's a bad swimmer. Basically can't attack unless he has his hat and wand.

Likes: Rabbits I agree., playing tricks or pranks on people, his hat and wand, his mother's cookies Can I have some?, candy, and magic tricks.

Dislikes: Being caught, badly hurting people, failing, his father's disappearance Don't worry, he's just going to pick up some milk., and tight spaces.

Fears: Losing his friends, his friends not liking him, losing his hat and wand, and accidentally killing someone Why is this a huge concern?.

Relationships: He mostly on good terms with people. Unless it's Gemi or someone else who dosen't like tricks and pranks that much... Why doesn't he like people like this?

Backstory: He's a magician who travels from town to town. Playing tricks and pranks on people sneakily on the way. He got his hat and wand from his father who was a magician before, who is currently missing. Is the rest of his family still around? How and when did his father go missing? Descriptive backstories are always better.

Other: Kirby fandom. Has a wand. He almost never gets caught by people while doing his pranks and tricks so he's not very known as a trickster and pranker by people...most people... He is gay. His magician wand is black and light green with a green bow instead of black and white.

Overall Rabi's alright. I'd appreciate longer, more thought out personalities, relationships, and backstories in your characters as that seems to be a common problem between Lil and Rabi. Physical appearance and random trivia is all well and good. However, with a shallow personality and no/very little backstory to show why a character is the way that they are, they become very boring to read about very quickly.

4/12