SELCOUTH BTS FANFICTION AWARDS 2021. [CLOSED]

J-HOPE CATEGORY OTHER RESULTS

Broken hearts

by aroha4ever

Judge: btsachu

Title 5/5
Cover 2.6/5
Blurb 4.7/5
Plot 20/20
First impression 13/20
Emotions 3/10
Flow 4/10
Character development 3/10
Vocals and grammar 4.5/10
Overall 2.3/5
Total 62.1

Review:
For Title and plot, they both were  really good. I'm impressed.

For cover it was too simple and not at all eye catching. So make sure to use editing with simple color texture.

For blurb it was good, but I reduced the marks because of spelling mistakes, for example it is 'sighs' not 'sights' and the blurb doesn't have any proper punctuation.

For first impression to be honest, it was less entertaining and  without  any paragraph, it made much more difficult to read the rest of the story. Do make sure to add paragraph with a bit more dialogues as the first chapter seems too rushed and blunt

For Flow, as I said before it was too rushed, therefore it seems unbalanced and less entertained.

For emotion, this part was poor. It seems like the characters themselves don't know what to feel. So express their feelings clearly.

For character development, it seems like in the first 3 chapters, it was okay, but after that it seems like they are not at all expressing themselves. So be more expressive while writing.

For Vocals and grammar, tenses were okay, but there were spelling mistakes and each sentence doesn't have proper punctuation at all (for example full stop)

Overall make sure to change spelling mistakes, write in paragraphs and with proper punctuation. You can do better.

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Punish me

by Taekook_my_hearth

Judge: btsachu

Title 5/5
Defines the plot very well.

Cover 3/5
It looks like you just edited the pictures together, nothing interesting was there.

Blurb 3.8/5
The blurb was good but don't know why I didn't felt any exciting  element there.

Plot 20/20
Good work.

First impression 20/20
Bold start.Even though the first chapter was a mature one , I think the writings was really good. Urged me to read further.

Flow 7.7/10
It was going pretty good but the more I reaches the end of the story the flow seems rushed.

Emotions 6/10
It wasn't that much effective for me but its enough for sensitive people.

Grammar and vocals 9/10
The writing style was great but I found some minor spelling mistakes which can be ignored by readers.

Character and development 7/10
It seems pretty good but I felt like Y/n character development got stuck in middle of the chapters.

Overall 3.8/5
The work is pretty good but needs a bit editing

Total marks 85.3 /100