Hello 2014

Truth or Dare

If you had a chance to know the outcome of both choices, which would you pick?

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It will be more fun if I tear it apart instead of rewriting it.

It was about a girl who was obviously the main character. She had an ex-best friend turned bully. Her dad was absent. She had a crush on the boy next door who was also the ex-best friend turned bully's stepbrother. She'd been left with her cartoonishly awful mother. Think mother gothel and then maybe worse. And on the day she graduates, her mother steals and spends all of the money that she'd hidden in a vent. Now, multiple things...

The way it was described it seems like I thought you could go out and look at apartments and move in the same day. No background checks or vetting process. Nothing.

Worse than that it seems like I thought that a person who was ready to have their own apartment would not also have a bank account. Was her job paying her in cash? Why is it in the vent?

Personally I'm crying if my mom steals my whole life savings and I have to go live with my friend (which if that was an option the whole time then what the fuck) but she's going to a party. It's actually way too nonchalant. Her friend essentially goes 'You were going to spend this time packing but you left that abusive household and are just going to borrow all of my stuff. Wanna go to a party?'

The party is at the crush's house by the way. The crush that is the stepbrother to her ex-best friend and now bully. Her ex-neighbors as of like 1 hour ago. Why did I write them this way?

Anyway, she gets to the party and they play truth or dare. The book was supposed to be broken up into 2 parts. The chapters labeled truth would show what would happen if she chose truth and the chapters labeled dare would do the same.

I have no idea what truth was going to be. I think I didn't even know when I was originally writing it. The dare she gives is to the ex-best friend and it is to help her ruin the dad's life.

Did you forget she had an absent father? It would make sense if you did cause that doesn't seem like her most pressing or most recent issue. Seemingly the logic is that her dad left and as a direct result her mother became awful.