Description ~ Very simple description. Nothing that stands out really, and doesn't give away too much about the story.
Hook ~ I used your first chapter, "The First Day" for the hook. There truly wasn't anything that stood out to me in this chapter. You went straight into it - which there is nothing wrong with that - but it did seem rushed or fast-paced.
Plot ~ I do think the plot is pretty similar to other stories. Even though I've only read a few chapters, there isn't anything that separates this story from other stories with this plot-line.
Descriptive ~ The main parts that I read that were descriptive was when you were describing the way the characters look and what they would wear. It was good imagery.
Grammar ~ I didn't see any big grammar or spelling errors. However,. In the first chapter there was one spelling mistake. You wrote, "All of them say down."
Just make sure to read over whatever you write before submitting!
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𝐁𝐨𝐨𝐤 𝐑𝐞𝐯𝐢𝐞𝐰𝐬 𝐅𝐨𝐫 𝐔𝐧𝐝𝐢𝐬𝐜𝐨𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐞𝐝 𝐖𝐫𝐢𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐬 { Closed }
Short Story{ CLOSED! } This book was written to help undiscovered writers get discovered. It's a safe place to get your book reviewed and, hopefully, get help with whatever problems you're having. I am not the most experienced writer out there, but I don't min...
