Plot ~ The plot is intriguing. I love the author's notes! It adds something unique and informative to the story.
Grammar ~ In the prologue, you wrote, "Can the treads of fate truly lies in our own hands?"
What you could write is, "Do the treads of fate truly lie in our own hands?" Or "Can the treads of fate truly lie in our own hands?"
Whenever you're writing dialogue make sure to put a comma at the end. In your story, I've noticed that you tend to forget to put a comma at the end.
Hook ~ I used your prologue for the hook. Personally, it didn't hook me. It was a decent start up, but there wasn't much to really hook me in, to where I wanted to continue. I think you could add a little more to the ending, but not spoil it, obviously.
Description ~ I like how you wrote your description. It's different from the other books I've reviewed so far. There was nothing wrong with it from what I saw!
Descriptive ~ Your story is very descriptive! I love the vocabulary used, and you do well with describing the scene, and emotions within the story.
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Historia Corta{ CLOSED! } This book was written to help undiscovered writers get discovered. It's a safe place to get your book reviewed and, hopefully, get help with whatever problems you're having. I am not the most experienced writer out there, but I don't min...
