How to Make a Warrior Cat OC

How to Fix OCs/Interperet Reviews

Here's a chapter a few of you might need... The 'real' chapters'll be up soon, I promise.

So, you've got a slightly-developed OC and a review; what next? Let me guide you through the minds of reviewers and how to execute what they suggest.

When we say your character needs work, don't feel bad! You should assume us to be honest, and if you don't want honest opinions, then ask for sugar-coated ones when you get a review. If a reviewer doesn't specify what needs fixing, then... Get a different review. If there's no why, then it's kinda pointless. So make sure to read deeply and between the lines. Here's some common lingo and how to interpret it:

'It's very... Creative'- This either means creative in the traditional sense, or you NEED to change it due to mary-sue-ness.

'Interesting'- Kinda iffy, something you might want to change.

'You might want to change...'- This means you really should change it. Now.

'It's... different.'- The way to sugar-coat 'mary-sue'. Or sometimes it just means different.

'Nice.' - Means we're tired and can't think of a complex analyzation :p

Those are just a few common ones; here's a few more tips:

Inquire. If something is unclear, ask!! We (I) love follow-ups! Also, if you've revised an OC, and want more advice, that's great!

Don't be that kind of person who's like, "Well I like my OC the way they are." Like WTF?? You wanted advice, didn't you?

After one review, send the (revised) bio to other books! It's really, really helpful.

Take the advice. We're (hopefully) good at this. Trust us!! Please?

Something that's really annoying is when you send an OC in and when the review's done you don't even see it. Or comment.

Alright... Sometimes it's a good idea to start over. Keep the main ideas/best parts (i.e. the things that were praised), but then scrap the rest. Read a book like this one, look at good OCs, google it, just... suck in good information, advice and rules. Base an OC off of that. Be the sponge.

Let's take a bad OC and then give some tips fix it! This will give you a good idea of where to start.

Name: Rubysparkle (seen this :o)

Gender: She-cat

Clan: DragonClan

Personality: Kind, shy, caring, and sweet, but really fierce in battle!

Rank: Deputy

Looks: Light gray, slender, pretty tabby with one red eye and one ice blue eye

Backstory: Rubysparkle was a rouge in BloodClan named Ruby. She was Scourge's daughter but then her siblings and mother died and so she ran away. She was in mourning when the Clan found her and took her in. The leader at the time, Spiritstar, took her as his apprentice. She got a prophecy: The shining Ruby will save the Dragon from the vicious Blood. BloodClan attacked a few moons later, and Rubypaw saved DragonClan by killing Scourge. Later, she became leader and went to StarClan.

Mate/kits: She had a mate from another clan, Fireclaw, but he died while she was expecting his kits. The kits were Flightkit, Purplekit, and Flamekit. 

Family: All dead :c

Alright, let's analyze! 

Name: Rubysparkle. Both non-valid names, especially Ruby-. Cats don't know what gemstones are. This can be fixed; I'd suggest a name like "Shining-" because it gives the same sort of feel as a gemstone but it's valid. 

Gender: Nothing to say... 

Clan: DragonClan? WTF? Cats. Don't. Know. What. Dragons. Are. 

Personality: This is the most generic personality EVER. You NEED to add flaws and CONSISTENCY. Add depth! Add unique traits! Don't do a personality like that. 

Rank: Deputy... Did she even get an apprentice? Did she DESERVE it? 

Looks: First, I CAN'T TAKE ANOTHER 'PRETTY' LIGHT GRAY SHE-CAT. They are SO common and overused. Second, heterochromia? Wow. I thought the world was better than that. 

Backstory: The Scourge's Daughter thing is so overused and stupid. He is dead! I mean, come on! Be creative! Also, I'd get rid of the prophecy. If you keep it, change the wording! Make it vague! Add mystery! The 'mother and siblings dying' is really cliche. BloodClan is dead, too. 

M/K: Okay... Forbidden love is just... the epitome of cliches. Especially the death... and the kits' names? Really? 

Family: I think you can tell what's wrong here. If not, it's this: dead families are NOT sad. 

So, this person has a review for their 'creative' OC. What next? Here's a challenge for you!

Create a REVISED version of Rubysparkle, while preserving the main ideas. Give me the bio in the comments! The winner gets a follow and an art request. 

a/n- bleh look a challenge

-drift