How to Make a Warrior Cat OC

OC Review: Emeraldstream

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for the very patient @Kitkatbug1
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Name: Emeraldstream

Mkay, normally I wouldn't be okay with it, but it's alright as she's not clanborn! If you did change it to be more realistic I'd go with Shiningstream, but it's fine as it is c:

Gender: female

Alrighty

Clan: isn't in one her and her sister are orphans fending my for themselves.

(^^why the name's okay) Good, but it I assume a parent of hers is clanborn? If so then why did they leave?

Rank: warrior (protects her sister.)

Wait she's not in a clan but is a warrior? Was she exiled or something? I really like the part about protecting her sister, I can totally see that 😊

Looks: she is a orange Tabby with white paws and a white tipped tail and her ears are tipped white as well. She also had bright green eyes, and a white muzzle.

Perfectly realistic, nothing wrong here, and I can see where the name came from.

Personality: always happy, protective, caring, merciful, only mad if someone or something threatens her sister.

Really fits her so far, though the backstory suggests she'd be a bit more... Wary? Maybe another flaw would be good, I can really see her being a bit controlling and doubtful of her sister :)

Backstory: her and her sisters parents were killed by wolves when they were found on the wolves territory on accident, they were the only ones to survive and grew up fending for themselves and eventually finding mates and settling down. (Sorry that was brief.)

No it's fine! Simple, short, but the parents dying is a little cliché, though not to much. It would be better is maybe her sister got hurt? It would add more depth and really show her protectiveness.

Okay so how her parents died is they were in a flood but the thing is they only survived because there mother saved them she didn't die In the flood she died later on because of heart ache from their dads death.

wAIT WEREN'T THEY KILLED BY WOLVES?

Mothers name is birchwood, because she was born in a birch wood forest and was mainly white with black and brown stripes. Dads name was waterway because he was a blue Russian and was born in riverclan he left later on because he wasn't accepted by his fellow cats to be a hunter and he was in love with a stray hence birchwood.

I really like the name birchwood, it makes sense, but waterway's a bit iffy...

Anyway after the flood emerald and quartz her sister and their mother went to river clan to see if they would take them in, but they wouldn't. That's how she met wolfpaw he was the leaders son (nothing to do with cannon was trying to make it interesting.) and helped them anyway. They were all starving and had at least one broken bone each from debris.

When did this happen?

They eventually got better after their mothers deaths and left on their own but staying close to the outskirts of riverclans border as wolfpaw would help them hunt ever so often and eventually told emerald how he felt towards her and they went from there. They eventually have kits and wolf is banished from riverclan. But he doesn't mind because he gets to be with his real family emerald their kits and quartz .

Cool! I like the flood version, and the fact RiverClan didn't take them in, something a bit uncommon in the OC world.

Mates info: another cat called wolfpaw. (Speaking of him will u review him as well.)

What's his warrior name? (Sure!)

Family's info: sister and her, alive parents dead.

Okay

So overall I like the whole idea but the details are a bit confusing. Like how did her parents die? Wolves or a flood? (Personally I like the flood better). Add another flaw, maybe change the name Waterway, too, as it's technically invalid. However the sister thing is cute and I like how Wolfpaw helps them and becomes a part of their family.
Emeraldstream gets a 6/10!

Yayyy getting back in gear! Darn this sucks.
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