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I'm thinking about writing a story but I want you guys to tell me want you think first OK? Please tell me if you like the idea and please give me some tips as I suck at writing!

July 10 1997: Homeless man by the name of  Gabriel finds missing child and asks parents to open soup kitchen for the homeless as a reward.

November 22 1997: Gabriel works up money to buy warm clothes for needy families and asks that they do the same for others.

December 2 1997: Gabriel helps open woman's shelter and in return they learn to make clothing for children who have lost everything.

January 1 1998: Local hero is to be awarded by the mayor for his great deeds January 27!

January 26 1998: Local hero goes missing day before he is to be awarded. No one knows his full name only that he is called Gabriel and always wares a black t shirt with the letters WWJD printed on the front and a brown pair of cargo pants. If you see a group of homeless men, weman, and children walking around town or they come to you and ask if you've seen this man the mayor asks that you give them food and water to help them on there search they are on a mission to find a man that has been deemed savior to many.

Gabriel's POV.
I lay on a metal table, a group of teens stand around me. The oldest looks to be about 19.
"Holy shit I can't believe we are actually doing this!" One of them says.
"Please don't do this! You don't want to reap what you are about to sew." I say and one of the teens, the oldest, tells me to shut up adding a few very colorful words in his sentence.
"Come on guys I mean do you really think this is nessisary? Egging churches and spray painting missions cars is fun and all but killing someone?"
"Shut the hell up Jordan! You knew what you were getting into when you gave your life over to Satan!"
'So that's what this is.'
"I didn't think we would hurt anyone!"
'These poor kids!'
"Your making a mistake!" I tried to reason until I felt the cold metal blade pierce my chest.

Third person POV.

The leader of the gang of kids had drove the knife deep into Gabriel's heart. He smiled smugly as Jordan screamed at him and rushed over to the table.
"I warned you!" Gabriel said as wings sprouted from his back and the wound on his chest healed....

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My dad gave me the idea for it but it was supposed to be just a short story but I think Gabriel deserves his own book what do you think? Please tell me yes or no in the comments below! (Hey that rhymed) And I hope you guys at least liked it a little!?

-Hatter

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