Author: OldSoulWriter
Book Title: The Academy
Summary: "A series of events will test your abilities, assessing your strengths and your weaknesses. Depending on your results, your schedule and teachers will be assigned. Work your hardest, do your best, and don't break. We don't take people who break."
Genre: Fiction
My Review: I enjoyed the format in which the story was written. I thought it was interesting how you had agent, section etc at the beginning of each chapter, but I was also a confused to the purpose it served. Your description is great!
The characters were a little confusing and it was hard to keep up with the various agents. I also almost wanted the chapters to be lengthier. There were times when I wanted more. Like the lying test, I felt like it should have been more intense than what it was giving off, that's just something to think about.
Overall I love the idea and plot. Your diction and description draws the reader in, but it was hard for me to stay connected. I wasn't feeling enough to stay interested in the story. It was almost as if the characters were emotionless. I think if you were to go back and add to the chapters that'll help tremendously.
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Tittle: Atelo
Author: Calipsye
Summary: She was good at being in the background. She blended in then blended out. I should've seen the signs. The classics. I didn't even know her but I feel responsible. For everything that happened. It's all my fault.
My Review:
Okay you my friend have a gift. The writing itself is so extraordinary. I have no words for your words lol. You a paint a picture so beautifully and it felt like I was there with the main character watching and experiencing this with him however, there wasn't enough.
Each of the chapters seemed to lack a development in order to carry the story forward. The story should be going upwards before things start to unravel, that's when it declines until there's a resolution. Each chapter is suppose to help carry the story forward. It felt like your story was on a steady road with minimal bumps. The writing is there, but there's pieces missing.
