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Incarnations Review

Author of the story is Merywenn1234

Incarnations is a story about gods representing the constellations of Cancer, Leo, Sagittarius, Gemini, etc. The gods feel similar to Greek gods, as they appear to have a bit of human to them, little flaws and such. The writing within Incarnations is lovely and uses a lot of imagery to really let the reader visualize what is happening, I believe that is a great quality to have with writing. The story itself has very minor flaws with words that should be there or shouldn't be, but nothing to major that would really deserve notice. Overall I believe the story is worth reading, especially if you like loooooonnnngggg reads as the author themselves even has a warning on their story to state that their chapters are long, and they most certainly aren't exaggerating. So go support the author and give the story a good ole read.

Lastly, before the story the author gives insight on something I believe most writers go through. They tell how as a writer, we grow and are constantly developing our taste and our style so to speak. Which is why when you look back at a story you made years ago, you always chuckle or cringe or something to symbolize how the story isn't anything you would've written nowadays. They say how they have written so many characters, so many worlds, so many scenarios, but because of their change in writing over time, has never finished. So that's why they vowed to finish Incarnation. I believe that's something praise worthy of its own. I hope writers read what the author had to say and they to attempt to persevere in their writing and finish their stories. You can't really get far if all you do is write a couple chapters, give up and then start a new story. You have to stick with something, make it your own, and create something you can be proud of. Anyways, that's all I had to say.

This segment is for the author mainly but feel free to look at what I had to say while reading their story, maybe it'll entice you to read it yourself.

Prologue : A strong start that leads into the story quite well. It gives the reader questions about what the evil truly is, what are it's intentions. The only issue I saw was that you occasionally messed up a word or two, so a quick read through the story could help get rid of them.

Part 1 : Pretty intense awakening XD

Ch. 1 : Do you mean imprinted when you say impregnated in his mind? The chapter has a few mistakes which is to be expected when writing such a large amount, I suggest taking a look and changing things that don't seem to sound right. Besides that this seems to be picking up quite nicely and you provide lovely mental images to help the reader visualize what is happening within. So far so good.

Ch. 2 : You begin to talk of the problems of incarnations dying on earth, but instead of saying more gender neutral terms, since there are both male and female incarnations, you seem to keep saying her, as if to imply only Korozo. Though I know she has undergone such a transition, I don't think you have to only say her when it could happen to anyone of the incarnations as your writing implies for the most part. Besides this the rest of the chapter is great. You end it off with a great hook and I'm worried to read what Cancer (I'm not even going to attempt the name), has in store for Korozo. There are issues here and there that you can easily fix with a quick reread. Another chapter good as always. Also... who has hit on scorpio?!?!? What advances is she fighting off?!?! Are there other gods or something, or does she occasionally go down to earth to chill amongst the mortals.

Ch. 3 : Like the chapters before, a reread seems to be needed to get rid of some minor mistakes. Besides that, you write the chapter nicely. Korozo reflecting on how certain individuals made her feel when they passed her mind, how she felt calmed by the humans who raised her (and oddly the priest) was nice and really reflects on how she is with humans. It seems though that despite personalities changing amongst the reincarnations of the incarnations, there seems to be certain traits that always apply, which is nice as it provides a bit of natural personality to them, like you'll know Cancer is always going to be an angy girl no matter what, but her personality can make her vastly different at it than her previous forms.