Author of the story is eulieQ
Vampirical Data is a vampire story, as the name probably implied. It makes many remarks on the typical over romanticizing of vampires within modern stories of vampires. The story itself though seems be fairly good, and has little to no mistakes when it comes to typos or grammar. The chapters are quite short, so it's good for a quick read if you're in the mood for something but don't want to read a ton. In the end, I'd say it's worth the read.
This segment is mainly for the author to see what I had to say while reading their story, feel free to look at it if you want, maybe it'll make you want to read the full thing.
Ch. 1 : Oof, that's a safety hazard, that club about to be written up if any inspector came in. The character just possibly witnessed a murder, or atleast assault. Yet she doesn't seem to mind that, and instead glares at the guy, which sure glare at him, but considering the fact that there are two unconscious people on the ground, and blood on the guy, you can only assume he won't really hesitate to hurt you as well which I feel would instigate a type of hurried response, or something to show that the situation is more than just a bit of to freaky foreplay. Besides that, the chapter had no typos as far as I could see and seemed written pretty fine. Though the fact that she is supposedly talking about this as she's running for her life is odd.
Ch. 2 : Pretty solid chapter and just as before, no mistakes I could identify. So good on you! I also really don't have anything to say on the chapter, though the comment on the car was amusing, the car didn't believe in mere yips, it must bark like the mighty beast it is.
Ch. 3 : You say on twice when saying the MC was on a wooden floor. You set up for some interesting clan rivalry or something along those lines here. And besides the double on typo, the chapter is as good as the others with little to no mistakes.
Ch. 4 : And yet another good chapter. There was no mistakes in this one as I could see, I don't really have any suggestions, though maybe you could put chapter 1 and 2 together, and 3 and 4 together. Since the chapters themselves are fairly short and end fairly quickly. I say these two as there is a sort of cutaway at chapter 2 when the character wakes up in chapter 3, thus separating the two instances. Besides that, I got nothing.
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