They Said by swaggie610my
Review by exodaddykokobop
IMPRESSION BEFORE READING
title- simple and relates well with your story presented.
cover- i like the picture you used, however, it kind of collides directly with the font used. try dimming the picture to enhance the font (reviewed based on the previous one).
description- though it's not too descriptive, nor does it contain any quotes or dialogues, i still kind of like it. its sort of creates anticipation, if not giving an insight on what the story has to offer. also, there was a slight mistake in "their", you had to put "their" instead of "there".
AFTER READING
with all honesty, i was looking for an actual plot with good content. not to sound too harsh, but i was a bit disappointed when all i got to read were a bunch of dialogues and monologues.
this story really has potential and honestly could be very insightful if you take your time and describe it patiently.
now writing is not easy, and most definitely not a matter of mere minutes, and not everyone's cup of tea. it takes one a lot of composing, weighing pros and cons and later seeing how effective the things you have written are, and if it is really eligible to make the cut. it needs time, nourishing and patience.
FOCUSES
writing style- i cannot say much in that field, now can i? like i mentioned, writing a piece that takes time, and obviously, i can't judge your writing style based on a few dialogues and monologues.
ADVICE
° take your time and write something with description and actual characters who display their emotions and justifies their actions.
° give them a chance to interact with the readers. the readers are more likely to understand the emotions and the situations the protagonist is in once they are given full authority to actively visualize.
° write fully composed chapters averse to the dialogues along with monologues. these two stated components are one of the few essential assets of an actually composed piece- these two do not only tell a story that needs a voice.
° be a bit careful while using homophones, such as, "their" and "there". here, "their" is related to people, whilst "there" refers directly to places and things.
ENDING NOTE
i really hope my advice was of help to you, and i want to see you write something descriptive with amazing plot ideas, such as this very one.
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