The Gloss Reviews

Vishkanya : Dark Secrets [Part One]

Note -

I may sound rude, but understand that it is for you to become  better as a writer.

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Author - Meheksmagicworld

Book - Vishkanya: Dark Secrets [Part One]

Reviewer - polymath_land

Review

Title -

The title is good. It's apt to the plot. After reading chapter 1, I was convinced with the title.

The title should be short and apt to the plot. It attracts the reader more.

Cover-

The cover is the first thing that the reader would consider before proceeding further to read a story. It must be apt to the title and should be intriguing.

Your cover is not good, and not quite attractive. The title of the story is not visible(because of the fonts style and it's colour), the cover is not clear enough. The background is too demanding.

Even though the 'vishkanya' and the 'couple' on the cover are apt to the title (slightly), it's not at all attractive and intriguing.
You can make a better and intriguing cover with better pictures and background( I hope 'gloss creation' helps you, just a suggestion).

A Cover should look like ' Yeah, it must be an original picture '.
No one should able to find out that the cover is an edited one, it should look professional.

Adding author name on the cover is completely your wish. I'm not commenting on it.

Blurb-

Where is the blurb?

"It's a story about two twin girls"-is not at all called as a blurb. You really have to work on the blurb.

After the title and cover, the reader looks up for the blurb. Your book has no blurb.
Even if your cover will be intriguing, the reader may not want to read further looking at 'no blurb'.

The blurb should give a 'peek-a-boo' of your book to the reader without revealing much. It should make the readers hook up with the storyline of queries like 'what, how and why'.

Ex - 'Mahir, a pilot, was found dead a few days ago. How did it happen?', 'Who killed him?' etc, if it is the story about the murder of Mahir, it should be added in the blurb after the little intriguing scenes from the story.

Your book has none of this!

If you want to add something about yourself (personal blurb) regarding the book, write it down after the blurb as 'author's note'/ 'personal blurb'.

Plot -

You have given the character sketch, that was okay, but you could have made it in a sequence like after Akanksha, you could have written about her mother and father, and later on her friends. Since you have not written any blurb, it may confuse the readers.

All I understood is, it is the story about teenagers and there was absolutely nothing related about vishkanya at first. You said two characters are to be introduced later, that was okay but you could have at least written about the attributes of characters.

Character sketch too did not give me any hint of 'dark secrets' and did not make me curious to read further as well.

' Imaginary place ' - something you have written about the place. All I can ask is " What is the need to write it? "