Book: Right With My Soul.
Author: khristygapher
Reviewer: Praahi
About the book:
Right With My Soul is a story about Acacia who lost her mom and as she was recovering from the loss, she meets Alex who is her classmate in her new school. Though he is termed to be Mr. Perfect, their relationship starts with hatred at least for Acacia and later it turns out to be something intimate.
Review:
- The cover is beautiful with a blue background and I can't comment whether the title and cover are apt for the story as the story is still progressing. But taking grammar into consideration I would recommend the title to be "Right through my Soul" as such unless the story demands it to be "Right with my soul". And punctuation marks like . , or special symbols like @ $ are not recommended in the story title.
* The story is In progress with 10 published parts.
- Good prologue though it is more like a character description of Alex and Acacia but still it did give out what the story is going to be about. And that is what the reader wants to know before continuing to read the story.
- As the character description was mentioned in the middle of the story, the reader would have already known them so there is no need of introducing but in general, characters are introduced in the beginning of the story along with a picture and a short description including their name, occupation and relationship to the main protagonists to avoid any confusion.
- As of now, the plot seems to be a teenage love story with some drama from friends and family though Alex's life seems mysterious making the story interesting. Can't say anything much until the story gets deeper.
- All through the story, there were not many grammatical errors but at times, there is a slight drift in the tense like go is used instead of went, drive instead of drove and as such. And I would suggest to correct the usage of , and . in few occasions. They are very minor changes which can be corrected by proof reading.
- The characters were strong and the dialogues were catchy making the story more engaging and interesting to read so that it won't become monotonous. Moreover, the dialogues play a very important role in getting emotional connection between the readers and the characters.
Things to Improve:
- Character introduction.
- Tense and punctuation.
Best Things
- Cover
- Prologue
- Dialogue construction
Overall, I would recommend this story to all the readers who love to read stories on love and friendship.
Note: Hope I was not harsh dear. I only want you to get better than what you are today in writing. All the best for all your future projects.
Thank you,
Praahi
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