Book name - She was the one . Author: Mess_LifeHP
Reviewer: Praahi
About the Story:
She was the One is a fan-fiction of Hardik Pandya, the all-rounder of the Indian Cricket Team. The story starts with the new of Hardik getting arrested for the crime of killing his brother Krunal Pandya's fiance Ananya. When no one from his family supports him, a lawyer named Pankhuri stands by his side but when all the evidences are against him, and day by day the problems start increasing making Hardik's life hell. Will he ever be out of the Jail? Even if he comes out, will the old Cheeky Hardik be back?
*It's an ongoing story with 22 chapters.
Review:
- Going with the cover and the title, one might conclude that it is a love story but, it is an emotional thriller. And I feel you chose "She was the One" as title because she is the one who stands with him or she is the one who proves him innocent probably. But, I feel the title could be something related to betrayal or heartbreak which would relate more to the main part of the story and also that gloom and misery of Hardik is not seen in the cover.
* The cover is attractive, and the title is catchy before reading the story but after knowing the plot I feel they can be made more specific to the story.
- It is always good to summarize your story in the description or prologue without revealing anything important inorder to get reader's attention.
- The main asset to this story is the story itself. I must appreciate your efforts in untangling each and every mystery in the most unexpected way. There is no such part which ends without a cliffhanger and I feel your successful in retaining all the readers as once anyone starts reading this story, they can't leave it in between.
* I don't comment much on plot because it is writer's imagination. And in any case no two brain's will be same. So, like every story, this one is unique and very interesting.
- Language is one aspect which makes the story interactive, So, grammar and tense are as important as the plot. This is where you need to work more. I found few typos which might raise confusion mainly in gender like his and her being misplaced and then there were grammatical errors too.
* Don't worry, I truly believe in "practice makes anyone perfect" So, spend more time on your story, re-read the part number of times until you are satisfied.
- Another thing I liked is the character description, each and every character is given a prominent role and the way you presented them is appreciable.
Need to improve:
- Better Title which would explain more about the plot.
- Work more on grammar, spellings and be careful with typos and punctuation as they might completely convey the other way round.
Best things:
- I can't get enough of the plot with so many twists and turns. (Seriously waiting for the next part)
- Excellent character description with pictures is something because of which your story stands out of the other's.
Keep up the good work and please don't take my words to heart. I just want you to be the best of yourselves and write as many stories as possible to entertain readers like me.
Overall, I would recommend this story to all the fans of Hardik Pandya as well as to all those who like emotional stories with a tinge of suspense.
Thank you,
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