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My heart belongs to you

Reviewer - Tanyamalhotra22
Author - SN_Skylar
Book name - my heart belongs to you (Os)

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Title ,

It is a usual and dull one that you find in most of the fanfics .
But perfect one for this story . It conveys sanskar's message to swara .

Cover ,

The cover is a bit unpleasing . It needs lot of work to make it a good one . It's just some sticker pics of swasan added up and a title in a most used font of picsart .

People always judge the book by its cover , hence I suggest you get it done properly with minor changes to make it perfect like changing the background , the fonts , the pics used in the cover etc .

Since , you added a disclaimer not to comment on the cover at end , well then..it is an okay cover for the story .

Blurb/prologue ,

Okay , the blurb was quite interesting . The quote was something new and it totally did justice to the story .

I love how the quote was a apt one for sanskar's character and that's how the story untangles .

Good job on finding that suitable quote .

Plot ,

This is again a most used plot in wattpad fanfics . But what I found surprising was , how you managed to convey the thoughts and emotions of sanskar and the portrayal of scenes using the song lyrics .

It was just fascinating to see how apt the lines of the song and scene were perfect for each other . Kudos for that !

The plot is simple , but it was described elegantly without any lags or drags .

Their cute moments especially the flashback scenes were heartwarming to read . Sanskar's love for swara was just too good , he accepted he did mistake and still yearned for her and searched for her .

Also , their breakup scene was a reality check and it didn't seem to be a drama or whatsoever . It was perfect for the storyline .

But it was too superficial to see that swara , at the end accepts him without hearing anything from him personally .

Also , if swara loved him truly , even after he kept quiet she would have atleast asked him on why he did it ? Not just leave him all alone and then at the end hears the news from laksh and ragini and gets back together .

Sanskar's part was justified as that's how his character is .

Also , how laksh finds swara ? It says that they kept searching for her all around , but she was only in her native place , didnt sanskar know about it beforehand ?

If I was searching for a person , I would most probably start from his/her native place .

Hence , the plot is good , but there many logical errors .

Characters ,

The characterization was perfect .

Sanskar's character was perfect all along , he didnt change back into another form and stuck well with his characterization . His dialogues while he spoke about swara in the present were a bliss to read .

Swara's character was equally good . I liked how boldly she acted while talking to sanskar's parents and also when she showed her attitude to sanskar when he didnt support her back in front of his parents .

I also like how you kept the characters minimal and how it only centred around swasan . Good job !

There isnt much to say about laksh , ragini and kavitha as they had minimal roles but they did a fine job too in helping swasan get back together .

The grammar,

Let's face it . This One shot needs high editing in punctuations and tenses used in many places .

Also , avoid usage of ellipsis because it makes a sentence incomplete .
There are many grammatical and spelling mistakes .

You can use only '!' One exclamation mark , no need to use '!!!!' for just a 'hi' and also the same goes for question mark '?' Used in the dialogues .

But inspite of all this , it's quite readable .

Also , good job on differentiating the past and present with different style of fonts .

These mistakes can be corrected by proof reading it before publishing the story  . 

Points to improve ,

• cover (slight modification)

• Grammer and usage of punctuations .

• Some logical errors

Good parts of the story,

• Sanskar's character.

• Simple plot .

• blending the story according to the song lyrics .

Overall the story is good one , swasan fans will like it as it's a happy ending and the story has all the lovey-dovey elements to add with it .

Note :- this review is only to help you dear . I am sorry , if I was harsh . I hope this will help you to get the story better !

Thank you
#tanya