Chapters read:
Chapters 1-3
Title:
It does the job, makes it very clear what the story is about. I'm not a huge romance buff but it works for me.
Cover: 7/10
It's nice, I like the ripped effect but it's a teensy bit juvenile in my opinion. I mean it does it's job and it does it well but I think there's definitely room for improvement.
Also I'd suggest using your name or a pen name on the cover just because it looks more professional than a username.
Blurb: 7/10
Firstly, THANK YOU for not slamming us with blocks of text.
I like the layout, with the list and the ticks (well I don't think I particularly like the ticks but I don't have a better suggestion xD).
I would, however, suggest just saying "A 'bad boy' boyfriend" to make it smoother to read. You can always tell us his name later.
I do think your blurb could be doing more, because it's so short every sentence is important. For example, instead of saying the popular girl of the school, you could say "As Southridge High's resident queen bee, drama surrounds Ava like honey."
(I know that's not what the high school is called and idk if honey actually surrounds queen bees but you get my point xD)
The blurb does tell of a very cliche story though, and while I'm trusting you have your own twists and turns, there's really nothing that makes it stand out from other books like this.
Opening paragraph: 8.5/10
See CHAPTER ONE below.
Punctuation and grammar 6/10
I went into details about this in the chapters and pointed a few out as I read but I'd suggest getting a beta reader or an editor.
Plot: 7.5/10
The plot seems to be developing well enough. I've only read the first three chapters but it's going well!
Pacing: 10/10
The pacing is brilliant. The chapters don't feel rushed or drawn out and the main plot point with the project happened in chapter one so the story is going at a great pace in my opinion.
Characters: 7.5 10
I say 7.5 because characters like Ryan and Matt I can clearly see their personalities but the others are still a bit wishy-washy. I can only see the surface of their personalities. It's still early in the story so I cannot really judge but from the first few chapters there are some voices that still aren't distinct.
Zachary's personality isn't clear but that's fine because Ava doesn't know him, but like Emily and Clara she knows well so they should be very obvious voices.
Creativity: 5.5/10
So far nothing has really wowed me but starting chapter 3 with a song really bumped it half a point up xD
Overall enjoyment: 8/10
I really enjoyed it! It's different from what I usually read and it was a nice change. Keep up the good work!
CHAPTER ONE
The opening line is attention grabbing so well done! I would suggest saying "five" instead of "5" as is usual for number under 100.
Also just saying "Five more minutes" full stop might make it EVEN MORE of a hook.
"I was doodling in my notebook when Mr Smith was teaching about some type of machine which I wasn't keen on knowing. I wasn't fond of this subject. I have been questioning myself constantly as to why I had chosen physics in the first place."
