Twinkling Awards 2020 || ✔

✨Avneil - @ImaginaryPagal✨

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Judgements were sent to us on 09/08/2020

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Afsana : An Avneil OS by Skm121 (One shot and not mature)

Cover : 2/5
The cover was okay but you could have made it better by adding a few avneil pics or something like that.

Title : 5/5
I loved the title. It suits the story very much.

Description : 3/5
The story description was just a scene in the story which is not enough. You can give any quotes or explanation related to the story.

Length : 9/10
You covered everything necessary. Just fewer portions needs more dialogue and scenes.

Plot & story line : 8.5/10.
I loved the plot. But still you could have made it more creative.

Grammar : 3/5
There were few grammatical mistakes which we commonly make. But sometimes it broke my chain of reading.

Overall impression : 7/10
The story was a good one. But things you need to change is the cover, add a proper description and clear grammatical mistakes.

Total : 37.5/50

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Avneil OS by RiyaMaji (seven shots and not mature.)

Cover : 5/5
The cover was awesome. I liked it a lot and it was also suitable for different one shots.

Title : 4/5
The book name was just Avneil OS. But the title of different one shots was all good.

Description : 2/5
The description was just the story title and author's note. You could have given a proper description about Avneil's love and all. Or a simple description in the stories would have been nice.

Length : 8/10
All one shots mostly covered everything necessary. Yet few scenes or dialogues in certain places would have been nice.

Plot : 8/10
I loved all the plots. It was simple and cute. Even if few of them were not yours, you did a great job.

Grammar : 3.5/5
There were few grammar mistakes. You should use punctuations more. Some unnecessary dots are there.

Overall impression : 9/10
Overall it was great. My chain of reading never broke. But you need to work on scenes and dialogues. Except for some minute mistakes, it was a great book.

Total: 39.5/50

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The jail saga : an avneil story by Shreyasgsg (12 chapters and not mature.)

Cover: 2/5
The cover is a simple one. It doesn't have the book name. So I suggest making a new cover for your story.

Title: 4/5
The title is good but doesn't suit the story entirely. Even if the story is related to what is happening in jail, a title which reflects the pain that avneil went through in the story would have been good.

Description: 1/5
There is no description. You should add one because it's an important part of the story as it's what makes people read your story.

First impression: 8/10
First impression was okay. It made me feel like reading more. But I was confused about the characters, so I suggest adding an introduction.

Plot: 8/10
It is a good plot but a bit confusing. Since it's not completed, I hope the mystery reveals soon.

Grammar: 3/5
There are not so many grammar mistakes but it did break my chain of reading often. I suggested editing it so that others won't have this problem.

Character development: 9/10
Character development was going smooth. It gave me a good idea about how the characters were in their past and now which shows the intensity of their pain.

Writing style: 2/5
You need to stick with one particular writing style because in the beginning few chapters were written in capital letters and later in small letters. Also use bold letters only for important or dialogues.

Length: 3/5
The chapters are so small, but they contain enough things needed for an update except a few parts.

Recommendation:

No, I won't suggest this book as a reader because it needs development. You write well but you need to change the things that I mentioned above.

Overall: 9/15
Overall it was good reading this book. But you must edit the book, cover should be eye catching and add a proper introduction and description.

Total: 49/75

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Love between strangers by tanzila_tuly03 (66 chapters and not mature.)

Cover: 4/5
I liked the cover but you could have made it more attractive.

Title: 3/5
The title is 'love between strangers' but from their first meeting itself both of them become best friends. So the strange thing doesn't suit here.

Description:1/5
There is no description. You should add a proper description about the story or a scene would be nice.

First impression:8/10
First impression was good. I liked the story. But I got a little confused with the language because it's different from what I have read so far. Also, you didn't mention the Sameer in the introduction.

Plot:7/10
I loved the plot. Even if it was a usual one, you wrote it well. But few faults were there. Like it was full of happiness. There are no negative characters in the story. Even if all loves happy go stories, few cliffhangers and tears would have spiced it up.

Grammar: 3/5
The story is mostly written in Hindi. Only a few dialogues were in Hindi but still mistakes were there in the beginning. I suggest editing it.

Character development:6.5/10
In the beginning Avni is shown as a jolly person but after marriage she became a typical housewife. Neil's character was portrayed beautifully from the beginning. Also after their marriage his family was behaving like their marriage was fixed before.

Writing style:4/5
The story was written beautifully. There was no confusion between dialogues.

Length:5/5
The chapters were long and it contained everything necessary.

Recommendation:

Yes, I would surely suggest this book.

Overall: 11/15
I enjoyed reading this book. You should change the things I said above. Except from a few faults, it's a great book.

Total: 52.5/75

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RiyaMaji is the overall highest scorer in the four books, congratulations.

tanzila_tuly03 is the highest scorer in books, congratulations.