The world from my mind

FANFICS PART TWO........

Ookk like I said this is part two of fanfic and I am going to follow whoever comments in this chapter and I will even dedicated a chapter to the first commenter.

7  Kelly .....I want you to come on tour with me Louis said a  bit nervously......

     Louis I have been waiting for you to ask me for soo long! I better go pack my bags.

      You better tell your mum louis says as he jumps into his BMW I will pick you up in five minutes.

      Mom!I am going on tour with five boy's whom I just met all around the world....can you please pack up my bags......and oh leave your credit card on the table I

      Need it for my expenses you know,

      Sure honey mom says would you need anything else?Oh no mum ....that's ok see you after six months !I say as I hear the horn of louis new BMW car

     

Mom I will call you every month!I say as I tie up my hair into a messy bun and put on my oversized sweater....and jump over the hedge and land straight into his  car

      See you after six months honey mom says as she waves to me from the kitchen window............................what ??

   My opinion  -  I don't have words to express my feelings right now.....I mean which mother in the whole wide world let their daughter go away with five boy's ....whom she doesn't even know?? .......well Kellys mum would,  and secondly why would the biggest boy band in the planet ask a random girl to go on tour with  Them ?.....what even???

8   PLOT TWIST - Kelly  needs to go home but one direction don't want her to go.....but she needs to go because she has made up her mind....so she sneaks out and goes home. When  the boy's find out they can't  bear it so they make master plan and that is to...................kidnap her.

My opinion - No comments.

9  Remember  Mia. ....her best friend. ....yeah she makes a come back and trys  to harm Kelly by  drowning her or something like that because she was jealous oh her cause she was the one who actually liked them in the first place. But then dear Kelly being the just girl she is forgives her.

My opinion  -  I think Kelly deserved it ....she ditched her only friend.....I mean she didn't even like the band in the first place and suddenly everything is focused on her. I fell Mia ' s pain ohh the pain!.

  10 They never go to school............never.

My opinion - well I guess for a girl living in a mansion and touring around the world. ....you don't have to do things like going to school.........what ever!

11 Kelly always works at starbucks or McDonald's or nandos where she meets niall and they fall in love etc etc.

  my opinion- I know that Naill said that he likes starbucks. ....but that does not mean that he practically lives in starbucks. And secondly why can't she work at Target or Wall-mart or why cant she be a fish monger or something like that!?

12 if Kelly does not work at starbucks.....she doesn't have anything to do so she is always at starbucks. and she also always orders an extra large caramel frapacchino with extra caramel and whipped cream with persian roasted nuts and thick cream milk.......and yeah don't forget the sprinkles!.

my opinion - if kelly eats like this then there is noo way she can have the body of a victorias secret model!!!

13  he looked at me with playful orbs .....do you know how to cook?
     nope I said popping the 'p'

my opinion - why do you have to pop the 'p'? I mean is that needed?

14  I combed my long brown hair and then tied it into a messy bun...then I put on my oversized sweater and my leggings. ......I have the body of a victorias secret model.,,..but I don't show it.

my opinion - it just keeps on getting even more ridiculous. ....I mean I had the body of a victorias secret model .....I would gave been on project runway.,...not wearing baggy sweaters!!

15 Melissa I called (A/N Melisss is her sister who is older to her by two years ) yes she replied. ...have you seen Joeyyy! ( A/N joeyyy is her stuffed teddy bear). No kelly she replied. ..why don't you ask Braxton(A/N Braxton is her brother who is younger to her by three years)........

  my opinion -CAN YOU STOP WITH THE AUTHORS NOTES PLEASE!!!!!!!

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Sooo this was part two!!don't forget to vote, comment and follow! - saucegirl

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