Title: When The Moon Rises (@aquilestories )
Audience: 14+
That'd be young adult.
Genre: Teen drama/fantasy/mystery
Initial thoughts: The vampire/werewolf vibes are strong with this one.
Hook - Spooky right off the bat. I'm banking on a vampire or werewolf, whatever it is, it's interesting.
Characters - The characterization is pretty decent. Nothing is too in-depth yet but considering the size of the cast and how few chapters I read, that's not a surprise. I got a good idea of who the central characters were and they all read as distinct individuals, and that is all I can ask for this deep in.
Syntax - The dialogue gets clunky in places and some scenes are walking a thin line to being tell-y, but otherwise it was alright.
Technicality - A couple of minor typos.
Formatting - Since I read this in Google Docs I can't comment on how it would look on Wattpad. It looked clean in the doc though. No missing spaces or stuff like that.
Your title page verso is in a weird place because of the page you added for the summary, but that literally doesn't matter. I just wanted an excuse to say title page verso.
Final thoughts:
8/10 I can tell you've put effort into this and I encourage you to keep going. Spooky vibes all around!
