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Author: DeeJayDJ010.
Reviewer: DragonOrchid24.

First Glance:

Cover Image: 4/5
Title: 5/5
Blurb/Synopsis: 3/5
First Paragraph: 3/5

Cover Image: I really like the simplicity. And it's easy to read and still captures the reader's attention. Although personally I would like to see your username on it as well.

Title: Again, I like the simplicity, and I'm hoping the title ties into the story in some way.

Blurb/Synopsis: Engaging, although it is written in a different tense than most blurbs. It's interesting, though I would prefer a little bit more information into the plot and characters rather than just an overview.

First Paragraph: I like the addition of descriptions of the bar and the bartenders. Though the wording is a little clunky, in my opinion. It's an engaging start however, and makes me want to read more.

Chapter 1:

Characters: 4/5
Writing: 3/5
Storyline: 4/5
Engagement: 4/5

It's an interesting chapter, and I really enjoy being introduced to the characters. A few places seem disjointed. She read the sticky note, but then sent a text "back" - it's just a little confusing in some spots especially since the reader doesn't know all of the characters yet. From the first chapter, this seems like a really interesting premise and I'm excited to keep reading and find out what's happening.

Chapter 2:

Characters: 3/5
Writing: 3/5

Storyline: 4/5
Engagement: 3/5

This was a different way to lead up to a main action scene: It was a little hard for me to stay focused in the middle as I couldn't see the relevance of the TV clip until the end of the chapter. However, it was still good information and an exciting scene in Clara's POV. I like that the connections throughout the chapters are starting to pull together. There's now a little bit of a connection that can be drawn between the two characters. It's definitely full of intrigue and mystery at this point.

Chapter 3:

Characters: 3/5
Writing: 2/5
Storyline: 4/5
Engagement: 4/5

Really long paragraphs, and could use new paragraphs to help with the separation of dialogue and to make it clearer who is speaking. It's a little confusing to keep track of who the characters are, and I think this could be helped by some background information, or more clear character introductions in the beginning.

Other than some writing clarity however, the storyline is still very engaging and intriguing.

Chapter 4:

Characters: 4/5
Writing: 2/5
Storyline: 4/5
Engagement: 3/5

This was an exciting chapter as you get into more of the plot! It is pretty good, and I really like the premise, though the writing could use a little more explanation as to what is going on. The ending especially is a little bit muddled and hard to follow - I really like the concept though!

Chapter 5:

Characters: 4/5
Writing: 2/5
Storyline: 3/5
Engagement: 3/5

Conversations are a bit confusing in this section between the prisoner and the other men. I think toward the end it is supposed to change perspectives to the people chasing the 2 men and the prisoner in the car, but it's not really clear who is speaking or what is really going on. The chapter itself is interesting in that it continues the story, and I think with some rewriting it could be even better.

Conclusion:

I think the overall idea of the story is excellent. It's got action, relatable characters, and what seems like a very exciting plot. However, at this point, I believe there are sections that could use some rewriting. Some of the dialogue is kept together in the same paragraph, making it confusing as to who is speaking. And some of the plot is hard to follow as it isn't clear where the characters are located throughout some scenes. However, I think with some fixes the story has amazing potential and I can't wait to see what happens to the characters throughout the rest of the story!

Thanks! 

(3/2/23) 
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