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There's Only You |🌼

Reviewer: imogenogucci01
Author: HappyEndingWriter.

Title: 7/10
It's not bad, it's just not inventive. It is too common
Cover: 6/10
You changed your cover while I was reviewing, I did not like that. However, I won't take away from the fact that your cover is beautiful.
Description: 3/5
I is straight forward but if it wasn't for this review I wouldn't click on it. It doesn't give me any vibes.
Grammer, spelling or vocabulary: 2/5
Although I didn't pick up on a lot of Grammer mistakes, I feel like you should run your work through grammerly or pro writing aid to help with spelling errors. Your vocabulary however is too bland and makes your work come off as cringey. Spice up your vocabulary.
Pacing: 4/10
It was all happening too fast, we didn't get enough time to explore their relationship as friends before they became lovers, everything just seemed messily bunched together. I feel like you could have eased us into her past with Gray, although you were hinting it at the beginning, there were too many info dumps or instances where soo much information is being thrown at your readers. This makes your reader get bored or even put down your book which we do not want to happen.
Plot: 4/10
Given that you were using a very popular troupe, you failed to spice up your take on it. No one is new to the friend to lovers plotline but we read it because we want to see the different take that an author will take. Yours was way to bland, okay they were friends, now they like each other and 'boom' they are in love, where is the spice?
Character development: 2/10
Your characters are two dimensional. I had a hard time imagining them existing in real life. Gray needs some redeeming qualities, I know that you want to portray him as the worst person on earth but he doesn't seem human at all, if you give him redeeming qualities, you strengthen the emotions the reader feels for the character. Keith is the most confusing character in this story and I will be making specific reference to chapter 7. You portray him as a sort of understanding person and next thing you know he is getting mad because he sees Zach -who you have established has a brotherly relationship with bella- holding her, it doesn't make sense. Make your characters more relatable and realistic.
Writing style: 8/10
You have a good style of writing which perfectly suits your genre, getting your work edited will be great.
Tension: 5/10
There were so many instances where you could have created good tension but you somehow didn't, I feel like your shortage of chapters contributes to it. A lot of tension could have been created in her relationship with Gray but everything felt so rushed.
Reader engagement: 5/10
I had a hard time getting into the story, I couldn't get myself to stay in the story, whenever I put it down I didn't feel the need to pick it back up. I feel it is because you don't have memorable characters.

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Thank You, 

4/10/23