(The story begins with a narration, illustrate it with effective imagery)
"Why breed elves, train them, and lead them to war...when you can just manufacture one of them to kill all your enemies? The process... is actually very simple, my King. I have found what is called an Amasota, it's a tree that originates from the Demon Kingdom's cannibal areas, and it consumes flesh and bones from its roots to grow and produce seeds. Truly...a cruel wonder of mother nature.
I have one in my lab right now, your highness. With the proper conditioning and magic spells, I can turn this tree... into a homunculus ritual. By using the corpses of our fallen warriors, I'll be able to create artificial elves, and repurpose their bodies and spiritual energy to create a new being that gathers the best attributes of every single one of them... the Elf Kingdom will obtain the ultimate warrior.
Now you may wonder, what would happen If the homunculus rebelled against us? Well, that's the best part, it won't. Since I have complete control over its breeding process, I'll use my sorcery to write unbreakable rules into his soul. No matter how much he tries, he won't be able to rebel against them.
(The Homunculus may not injure an elf or, through inaction, allow an elf to be harmed.
The Homunculus must obey all orders given by its master, except when such orders would cause an elf to be harmed.
The Homunculus will always protect its own existence, as long as it's aware that in doing so no elf gets harmed or his safety is put at risk.)
You can trust me on this, my King, just like you've already done so many times in our past together. Now, it will take time, I'll need a lot of resources, mainly being able to recover dead warriors from the battlefield. But I assure you that by doing this, we will achieve victory over our enemies, as well as protecting our people from the horrors of war. TRUST ME, MY KING, THIS WILL WORK."
(Next scene)
Immediately as the narration ends, cut to a double page spread of the Elf Kingdom's Castle with action lines to the center, as the following flash balloons are shown:
ATTENTION SOLDIERS, ATTENTION! THE CASTLE IS UNDER ATTACK! I REPEAT, THE CASTLE IS UNDER ATTACK!THIS IS NOT A TELEPATHY TEST! AN INTRUDER HAS ENTERED THE CASTLE AND IS KILLING EVERYONE! SECURE CIVILIANS AND PROTECT THE KING!
Showcase a lot of action scenes of the main character dashing through the main entrance and a huge courtyard, as he slices and dismembers in rapid succession many warrior elves with his green spiritual sword. Make it very clear that they can't keep up to his moves, as panic arises, and they become less organized (perhaps 4 pages long).
YOU ARE READING
Dystopian Soul
ActionArtemis is an elf homunculus created to serve the Elf Kingdom and become his deadliest assassin. However, when he finally rebels, he's stopped and sealed in a paralyzed state, to never hurt anyone again. Now, centuries later, Artemis breaks free, fi...