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Mary Sue Review #1- Nekomimi Hoshi

SO, FIRST SUE REVIEW! WHO'S ON THE MENU TODAY?

*~Nekomimi Hoshi~*

Oooooh boy. This is one heck of a way to kick this off. As a side note, I'm going to be heavily formatting this info since it was originally all clumped together. Original text is in normal font, my comments are going to be in bold. With that being said,

Let's begin.

konnichiwa! (thats romaji for hello!) Hoo boy this is gonna be one of those reviews isn't it. Prepare yourselves. I'm most likely gonna get extremely angry about everything after a certain point.

nwn anywAY this is my Madoka Magica, FNAF, CUte high earth defence club, hetalia, Vocaloid, Inuyasha, Assasination classroom, kagerou Project, Seraph of the end, Wadanohara and the great blyue sea, Mogeko castle, Diabolik lovers, Attack on titan, and Tokyo Ghoul OC. HOLY FANDOMS BATMAN! I hadn't heard of quite a few of these before I stumbled across this OC. That being said, I'll still review every part of this Sue to the best of my abilities.

Her name is Hoshi Nekoimi (western order) Hoshi means star because ssTAr. Honey, you may have well have just said "because potatoes". Aaaand now I'm hungry.

she's a cat demon, titan shifter, magical girl, and vocaloid!(i can't say how much percentage she is, gomenosai i suck at math)

NOOOOO. Holy mother of Zeus, I'm not really sure where to begin. I'm not completely sure where the the 'cat demon' part came from, but I'd be willing to bet maybe Inuyasha. So, Titan Shifter. Let me just reiterate my thoughts:

NOOOO.

There are way too many Titan Shifter OCs out there, and at this point it's getting freaking ridiculous. There are (as far as we know) five Titan Shifters in the manga canon. FIVE. Every one of them had to go through crap just to get the stupid Titan Serum, and honestly, YOUR OC WOULD PROBABLY NOT BE ABLE TO GET ANY. For the sake of spoilers, I won't go on too much, but still guys, can we not do Titan Shifters? They're AoT's version of Alicorns at this point. Also, going back to her appearance and all of her other races, SHE REALLY DOESN'T BELONG IN THE AOT UNIVERSE. The AoT universe is mostly realistic, and it sure as hell doesn't have BLUE HAIRED, PINK EYED, NEKO GIRLS. *GROAN OF DONE-NESS.*

The magical girl thing can be somewhat excused in Madoka Magica, since they have a slightly more lenient policy when it comes that, but Cute High Earth Defense Club? Not so much. Wombat finds the guys at an all-boys school, and I don't think Hoshi would really be able to become a part of all of that.

Since she's a Vocaloid OC, I understand the Vocaloid part- but then I have to ask why you made her a Vocaloid in the first place? Vocaloid has no set canon, nothing to really make an OC off of unless you want to go off of one of the popular story things (Like Story of Evil) or pre-existing Vocaloids (for example, all of the Kaito siblings), but???? I don't know, I'm nitpicking this now.

she turns into a female titan like annie but she has different hair and face and stuff and she's bigger she's a 50 meter class.

50 meter class.
50 METER CLASS?
DO YOU REALIZE THAT'S THE SIZE OF THE COLOSSAL TITAN?
I JUST????

she was contracted by kyubey and wombat because she's the 6th battle lover but the only girLl of them.

But...why? The boys weren't exactly The Chosen Ones, Wombat mostly chose them because he was tasked with saving the world and they're the first people he met.