OC Critique #1: Nightcat (Creepypasta)

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Thanks to @Waffles0for0Life for submitting the first OC for me to properly review!

Like before, the original text will be in normal text, while my comments will be in bold.

Let's get started, shall we?

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The picture is not actually how she completely looks, I had recently changed her mask to a full one so it isn't cracked!! Sorry for that!

Alright, so looking at the mask, it looks somewhat like a kitsune mask:

I'm not sure if this was intentional, as Nightcat seems to be based in probably America or perhaps Canada, but I thought it'd be interesting to note

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I'm not sure if this was intentional, as Nightcat seems to be based in probably America or perhaps Canada, but I thought it'd be interesting to note.

Name: Autumn Gillespie

Thank the gods- she doesn't have a super edgy name! Although that last name gives me war flashbacks to My Immortal.

Name meaning: she was named Autumn for her light brown hair that reminded her parents of the color of leaves when they fall. The name meaning fall.

Heads up guys- when babies are born, unless they have super dark hair, they usually look bald. I'd generally suggest against having your character named after physical traits. Also, parents usually plan out names in advance, so your physical appearance when you're newborn probably won't determine your name.

The surname Gillespie is an Anglicized form of the Scottish Gaelic Mac Gille Easbuig, and the Irish Mac Giolla Easpaig, both of which mean "servant of the bishop".

Wow you did your research. Like dude most people just give their characters a name and run with it.

She got the name Nightcat because one witness described her as a night creature and the cat part because of her personality and claws.

So the night creature part I understand, but how would they know anything about her personality? And...claws..?

Creepypasta name: Nightcat

Nicknames: Night, kitty, Autu ((abbreviation of her name, Autumn))

Who is giving her these nicknames in the first place? Autu might be a nickname by her coworkers or family, but who calls her Night or Kitty?

Gender: Female

Age: 21 ((This is when she snapped)) 31 now

THANK ALL OF THE GODS. SHE'S NOT ANOTHER TEENAGER. I have seen way, way too many 16 year old pastas- hell, I had one when I was in middle school.

Sexuality: Asexual, this means she does desire romantic activity.

YES. Holy crap guys- ace OCs are rare enough, but ace OCs that still feel romantic attraction? They're like super ultra mega rare. Being on the ace spectrum myself, as well as having an ace best friend, this makes me overly happy.

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