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OC Critique #10: Lachlan Green (Creepypasta)

•Basic info•
Pasta name: N/A
So does the news not give him any sort of nickname? For example, the Zodiac Killer

Name: Lachlan Green.
Nothing too edgy, but it's certainly interesting!

Nickname: Lachie
Who calls him this?

D.O.B (Date of Birth): March/22/1987

Age: 29 (he's going to be 30 on March 22 that is my b-day)
WOO, NON-TEENAGE CREEPYPASTA! And while it's fine to have your OC have the same B-day as you, it sorta rings some bells for me.

Currently living: A normal looking house in paisley Scotland.

Birth place: Paisley Scotland

Species/race: white and human.

Eye color and hair: hair is auburn, eyes are light blue.
The picture makes his hair look more brown than auburn.
As I've said before in at least one other review, red hair/blue eyes is the rarest combination in the world, but it's still good!

Clothing:
Combat: black face mask that covers his his face hair, blue goggles. Green Military clothes and black military. boots
I wouldn't exactly call a green hoodie "military clothes", unless the outfit is different from the picture. Does he wear any sort of gloves to hide his fingerprints?

Alternative: a white jacket, grey shirt and jeans.
Nice and simple, good.

•family•
Mother: dead
Father: in jail.
Brother: none
Sister: none
This all looks fine (especially for a creepypasta), but you should list his grandparents & kid, since they're in his backstory. You may also want to include their names, as well.

Medical info

Blood type: AB-
AB- is actually pretty rare!
If you're going off of the "blood type personality" theory, though, Lachlan would be closer to the O blood traits.

Body type: he has a large frame, and muscular build.
So sneaking and fitting though small spaces would be difficult, but killing people, not so much. Sounds fine to me!

Disorder(s): Anxiety, PTSD 
These are fine, considering his backstory, although it's likely that he also has Antisocial Personality Disorder (APD), Borderline Personality Disorder (BPD), or something similar to them. This is where Google becomes your best friend as a writer.

Fears: Phonophobia, Mnemophobia.
Fear of loud sounds, linked to anxiety, and fear of memories- particularly traumatic ones. These both fit with his anxiety and PTSD, although I'm curious if he has any phobias not directly caused by incidents in his backstory?

Allergies: peanuts, peanut butter, and dogs.
Isn't peanut butter just kind of part of having a peanut allergy...?

•physical features•
Height: 6'2

Weight: 220 lbs (he's a body builder a regular height to weight ratio are for people with less muscles)

Tattoo(s): two gun tattoos on his back.
Did he get them while he was in the military?

Scar(s): scars all over his body under his clothes and face mask.
Do his neighbors/co-workers question them? How does he explain them?