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Review 27 ↠ Down N' Out

Title: Down N’ Out

Author: @NikeForest 

Genre: Fanfiction

Rating: 9.0

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Hello there Nike! SO, Down N’ Out. One of your many, many books! The start of the book is fantastic. I am a total sucker for third person, but that’s total personal preference. Your plot is very, very strong which is always good! 

Now, your cover picture is fantastic. I love that picture of Liam; it’s fantastic, especially for your story. The title size works, it’s a little small but it fits well for the space. Unfortunately, your username isn’t visible! Just looking at the cover, I wouldn’t even know who wrote this beautiful piece of work!

Grammar-wise, I didn’t see any big issues. Mainly there were minor spacing and punctuation issues, such as comma splices. One big thing I would suggest you do is go back in and take out extra indentations, especially in the first chapter. There isn’t really anything else I saw. Your subject-verb agreement was fantastic!

Your plot. Goodness, your plot is fantastic. I love the development of Breanne’s character. The bad girl persona is very interesting, and I find myself wanting to know more about her from her first words to the end of the first chapter. The thirst for knowledge is what drives a reader forward. Let’s just say your book is the opposite of a desert. Liam, poor guy. He drew the short end of the stick, no? 

Regardless, your book is amazing. The different pieces of your book all come together very well. I rated this story a 9.0. Sure, there could be some minor editing, but you have done a fantastic job. Your cover could use some work a bit but your plot is strong. Keep up your confidence as a writer! I’m looking forward to reading the next update of this book. x