summary: In the past three years since he's entered Hogwarts, James was fairly certain that he was breaking more than one rule when he enters for his fifth head and none of them have little consequences. With his fifth year becoming filled with confusing feelings, secret relationships and a load of mischief that has his blood boiling with a fear that he had never knew he had, James is lucky to even be alive with the major rules he's already broken on his first day.
After all, Werewolves aren't supposed to be lovers.
review: I was so excited to read a book with such an underrated pairing! To be honest, I've always been able to see James and Remus together.
You've done an excellent job of portraying a teenager battling his conflicted emotions. James isn't really sure what to feel, and you really helped portray that to the reader. I especially loved the part where James confides in Lily about his feelings for Remus.
So far, the characters seem to be very in character; they act much like their canon personalities, which is sometimes the most difficult part of writing fanfiction. James began the book desperately infatuated with Lily and up to no good in the Forbidden Forest, which sounds exactly like something James Potter would do! Lily Evans also seems to be in character, and I'm excited to see how you create James and Lily's sibling bond.
Though there hasn't yet been a lot of Remus, he seems to be in character. Your descriptions of him are canon, and he seems to act like the Remus we all know.
I hope that you add more Marauder scenes in the next few chapters because it couldn't be a book about the Marauders without the Marauders! I really want to see if James confides in anyone else about his feelings for Remus, and what the endgame of it is.
My sole suggestion would be to add more dialogue into the prologue, and possibly adding the scenes that you mentioned (such as Sirius falling, etc.). That way, the reader will feel more deeply drawn into the story because it's more interesting to read it than to read about it.
Other than that, your book is off to an amazing start! I'm very excited to see how it all folds out! I hope that this review helped!
