Light Novie Awards 2019 [CLOSED] | The Light Novel Society

Fanfiction Prelims Results!

Judged by: NikkoTrinity

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Hello Everyone!

I do apologize for the wait. Seeing as it is a fanfiction category, I thought I would take my time to really soak up the stories and the anime/manga/light novel it is based off of. Please do not be discouraged if your book was unable to make it past the first round. I enjoyed the potential with each and every story. It was honestly hard for me to choose. I do hope to see you next year and how much you have improved.

Congratulations to those who made it past the first round! Don't settle down just yet because on the next round, I will be judging much harsher. Good luck and see you all soon!

ELIMINATED

AltairMorpheus → The Renegade General

Title: 4/5
Cover: 2/5
Synopsis: 6/10
Hookline: 1/10
Character Development: 2/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 3/10
Plot: 3/10
Small Review:

The synopsis to your fanfiction is intriguing, but it was mostly filled with misspells, punctuation errors, and incomplete sentences that could be adjusted or removed. Once this is better improved, readers will pull in gradually to give your story a chance compared to before.

Regarding the hero's identity and the other characters information before the first chapter, I felt that it was a rather tedious chapter. I would have liked to have learned that information gradually while reading the story. That is what most readers prefer honestly. I'm not entirely sure you understand how the second person point of view writing style works. First person point of view relays to readers from a perspective of a character/narrator with "I", "we", "me". Second person point of view is the voice of the onlooker which is the reader. Basically, you are telling the reader that they, "you", are saying this, doing that, feeling this. It does not make sense to make a fanfiction with Y/N and have first person point of view. It seems like you were too lazy to come up with the main lead's name and want the reader to decide for you. Is the story written in a script style? There is missing and unneeded punctuations, especially when a character and the lead are engaging in conversations.

Overall, it is clear you do not have a voice as a writer. To earn that voice, you must read and retain all the information and inspirations of other writing styles to be able to create your own. As of now, your writing style is all over the place. You have the potential, so don't give up.

Total: 21/6

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ThisIsMeRynelAblaza → Meeting You Again

Title: 2/5
Cover: 1/5
Synopsis: 1/10
Hookline: 2/10
Character Development: 2/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 2/10
Plot: 2/10
Small Review:

To be frank, I am a little confused just from reading the synopsis alone. There was not enough context for what the story is about nor were some of the names recognizable because I do not know what anime you are referring to other than Blue Exorcist. It deters me, a reader, from wanting to give your book a chance. I think, perhaps, there is also Assassination Classroom in the mix? The cover does not necessarily grasps a reader's attention. The quality of the cover is blurry and the titles are not legible. I would suggest looking for a graphic cover artist on Wattpad and apply to get a quality cover your book deserves.