Light Novie Awards 2019 [CLOSED] | The Light Novel Society

Romance/Slice of Life Winners!

Judged by: NikkoTrinity 

Yo Everyone!

I do apologize for the long delay. It's been rough and I needed firm concentration to properly read and score each of the stories.

Please do not be discouraged if your book was unable to make it. I enjoyed the potential of each and every story. I do hope to see you next year and see how much you have improved. After viewing the results, please stick around for a final important announcement that will be published after ALL of the finals have been published.

Congratulations to the winners! You did a really great job and I thoroughly enjoyed reading your stories.

(((o(*ﾟ▽ﾟ*)o)))♡

ELIMINATED

kazuki_sl → Ghost King's Princess: The Birth Of A New Goddess

Hookline: 7/10
Character Development: 4/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 5/10
Plot: 4/10
Small review:

Like my last review for your book, the pacing of the story moves rather fast, information is divulged too early, not enough to go on for character development, especially when developing her cultivation art. There is many grammatical and punctuation errors, a lot of telling rather than showing, which I've mentioned in my last review to try to show the emotion, the senses, and the scenery rather than telling the reader so that they can fully immerse themselves into the story's world and in the character's mind. Your story has potential. It just needs to be plotted out more to keep a consistent flow that engages readers. By not giving the character power too easily, the reader can connect with them on their journey and it will make it all the more worthwhile and emotional.

Total: 20/40

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theashesofthephoenix → Ashes of the Pheonix - The Fade

Hookline: 8/10
Character Development: 7/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 8/10
Plot: 7/10
Small review:

The long body of paragraphs create needlessly lengthy chapters that take up an enormous amount of time to read. Even if a reader does take breaks in between, it can be draining. Your story does have the potential to gain readers. Try cutting the lengthy chapters into parts like Chapter Four Part 1, Chapter Four Part 2, and so on... Also, keep watch of how long your sentences run-on. Take a breather. Add a couple of periods, colons, or semi-colons for readers to be able to take a pause and absorb the events that have transpired. Overall, your growth as a writer is at a level that most writers aim to be. Your story is truly a gem that is possibly passed over because of these flaws. Hope you take my advice so that you can grow your platform as a writer. Keep writing!

Total: 30/40

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haru25486 → Phantom's Requiem Book 2: Reign of a King

Hookline: 6/10
Character Development: 8/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 8/10
Plot: 8/10
Small review:

Most of the stuff that is revealed on each character felt like it should have been revealed in the first book, so rather than it feeling like a second book I am reading, I feel like I was cut off for most of the character's journeys and development and was planted close to the beginning of the end of their story, if that makes sense XD I loved the intense romance scene between Raven and Iris. And whoo boi, did that make my heart scream! XD But how could you make my heart so sad after that..! Uuu There is a lot of emotion - specifically a lot of scolding and crying- dialogue flows well (which is hard in most cases of writing to achieve), each character does have their own personality, but I can not really say much towards the character development since it is the second installment to the book's series. This book, or rather series, has great potential to pull in a wide range of fantasy/adventure/kingdom-in-turmoil fans who enjoy reading books such as yours. And I am one of those fans. Next time, don't doubt your first book and enter it in the contest. I look forward to reading your first and second book on my own personal time.