Light Novie Awards 2019 [CLOSED] | The Light Novel Society

Romance/Slice of Life Prelims Results!

Judged by: NikkoTrinity

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Hello Everyone!

I apologize for being rather late on posting the results. It was just so hard to choose who to eliminate. Ugh! You all had wonderful stories full of great potential. If you did not pass, please do not be discouraged. Keep writing and hone your craft. I would very much like to see you all next year to see what improvements you have made. Thank you so much for participating! ❤️

Congratulations to those who passed! Since there is not enough participants for a second round, the category will immediately be moved up to the finals. It will be published around the same time EST. Again, hard to decide! But good luck to all! ❤️

ELIMINATED 

ArchlordZero → Gate Guardian - Song of the Frozen Soul

Title: 3/5
Cover: 3/5
Synopsis: 7/10
Hookline: 2/10
Character Development: 5/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 4/10
Plot: 4/10
Small Review:

Hook line? Not as I had expected. I would suggest scrapping the idea of using the character to immediately introduce his name and telling the reader that this is his story. Beginning with the next paragraph ('Being a sixteen...') would be a better opening for the reader to immerse into. The MC seems to be breaking the fourth wall by acknowledging the reader which, if done correctly, would be fine, but it just doesn't fit the story. As it progresses, it just seems like I'm belligerently reading in a rather fast tone. I'm just not absorbing much from the story. Just picking up bits and pieces and not really understanding what is the point of it. Especially with the characters personalities and interactions. It's unrealistic. The structure of the sentences are incomplete, have punctuation errors, misspells, and quite a few that are unnecessary or could be adjusted or switched around.

To conclude, you're missing your author's voice which is why the flow of the story is inconsistent. Read your favorite books, similar genres, and books written in first person point of view. By doing this, you'll gain the knowledge and an idea of how you want to properly write your story. It has potential, so don't give up!

Total: 28/60

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Haydos12344 → Seven Towers

Title: 4/5
Cover: 1/5
Synopsis: 3/10
Hookline: 3/10
Character Development: 3/10
Grammar/Sentence Structure: 3/10
Plot: 3/10
Small Review:

The cover is lackluster. It does not leave a lasting impression that makes a reader want to read your book. I would suggest getting a Wattpad graphic artist to make one for you if you cannot make one that appeals to audiences. The synopsis needs to be worked on. Provide more context because it leaves little to no information that entices a reader to want to open the book. Vocabulary is vast, but description-wise, a bit lackluster. There is many punctuation errors, a couple misuse of verbs, unnecessary lines, missing words, and repetition. Overall, it's a mess. But your story has potential. I would suggest reading your favorite books, specifically ones with similar themes/genres. It would help you immensely on finding your author's voice and the new knowledge will help you hone your writing skills. I hope to see you next year to see what progress you will have made. Good luck and keep writing!