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✅ Detective exorcist

Author: TheSpadeAndAce

Book cover:

I love how simple the book cover is. 'Di ko lang bet 'yung ginamit mong font kasi parang nilagay lang diyan tapos wala na-gano'n ba.

Title:

The title didn't catch my attention. Obviously, it is about the "detective exorcist".

Synopsis:

Okay sana 'yung synopsis kaso nag lagay ka ng questions.

I somehow got ideas kung anong mangyayari sa story because you put questions that will lead to your story's main scene/point.

Kung maglalagay ka ng mga tanong, make sure na macu-curious sila. Or much better, don't put questions. Kahit describe mo lang ang protagonist mo, ayos na 'yon.

Writing style:

Salute to your writing style, man. I love how you write so perfectly, minsan lang magka-mali. Papasa na as professional. Check lang minsan 'yung grammar/s and spelling/s.

Narration:

This is where I got hooked. The narration's not boring. Each chapter isn't long, sakto lang kumbaga 'yung haba. You described almost every thing, and that's a good thing. Medyo boring kasi kapag lahat dine-describe, pero 'yung sa'yo, sakto lang lahat.

Characterization:

I hope may character development 'yung kada character. And I also hope to see their flaws or bad side or any negative side sa mga susunod na chapter, para mukhang realistic talaga sila.

P.S. In love ako agad kay Keir.

Overall comment:

Almost perfect lang kasi wala namang perfect na story, right? But everything's fine on your story. Interesting, catchy, mysterious. Geez, I thought you're a professional writer.

Rating:

9/10

Suggestion:

Check grammatical and typographical errors lang.

Lastly, stick to your plot and plans. Take down notes about everything. Para hindi magulo 'yung story.

Let me know if I helped you. Please leave a vote. Thank you and stay safe! Good luck, luv. Keep writing.