scarlet's critique shop

✅ Saving Willow

Author: Astramis_Airi

Book cover:

The book cover's fine. 'di ko lang bet 'yung font and color na ginamit mo sa username mo.

Title:

The title says it all.

Synopsis:

You put too much information on the synopsis. Nando'n 'yung mahalagang mangyayari. Sinabi mo agad sa synopsis na si Adler ang mag sa-save at may nangyaring masama kay Willow.

Describing them would be enough, dapat hindi mo na dinamihan 'yung intro palang. Pa'no maho-hook 'yung readers mo?

Writing style:

Doesn't put the right punctuation mark/s. Some words were all capital, which was not right. Magulo. Edit your work.

Narration:

Magulo rin ang narration. Medyo maayos ang English pero check pa rin sana. 'yung mga scenes parang masyadong mabilis. Maikli rin kada chapter, onti lang 'yung mahaba. Dapat sakto lang.

Characterization:

Medyo maayos naman 'yung characters. Gaya ng sinasabi ko sa iba, sana may character development.

Overall comment:

Goods naman. Medyo interesting, pero predictable 'yung scenes. Ayusin mo lang 'yung pag narrate mo and how you write, for sure maayos at maganda na 'yang story mo.

Rating:

5/10

Suggestion:

Research, research and research. I swear, it'll help you a lot.

Search about the things you needed to learn as a writer. Watch vlogs of some famous writers and their tips on writing.

'wag mo madaliin mag update. It takes time to think (a) great scene/s for your next chapter.

Use punctuation mark/s.

Don't use all caps sa mga words (e.g. "ANO?") and don't use a lot of punctuation mark like "???", hindi maganda tignan.

Read other books para ma-inspire ka. Para rin makakuha ka ng ideas kung pa'no mo papagandahin 'yung sa'yo. But don't you ever steal their works, alam mo naman siguro 'yon.

Lastly, stick to your plot and plans. Take down notes about everything. Para hindi magulo ang story.

Let me know if I helped you. Please leave a vote. Thank you and stay safe! Good luck, luv. keep writing.