scarlet's critique shop

✅ Souldream

Author: allipsy

book cover:

The book cover's not good but it's also not bad. It's simple, i like it.

title:

I thought it was supposed to be "soulmate" but when I read it, gets ko na kung bakit souldream. nice title. good job!

Synopsis:

The synopsis is fine. It doesn't say much about the story's main point tyaka nakaka-curious din. good job din sa part na 'to!

writing style:

And the problem starts here... ang ganda ng writing style sa synopsis pero no'ng sa inside na, can't agree with you. medyo jejemon ang way ng pag type, not using the right punctuation, more capitalization na hindi naman dapat (e.g. ANONG SABI MO?). edit it, ghorl.

narration:

another problem is that your narration's a bit messy. jumping from one scene without explaining what happened or changing the scene too fast.

characterization:

okay, sa characters, goodies naman, hahaha. kagaya ng mga sinasabi ko sa iba, character development is one of the things your story needed para maging almost perfect 'yan o kahit maging maayos lang.

overall comment:

all-in-all, tbh na-enjoy 'yung takbo ng story. hindi ko lang talaga matagalan 'yung masyadong maraming typographical and grammatical errors. but it's interesting!

rating:

8/10

suggestions:

research research research

check dialogue tag(s)

edit the typographical and grammatical errors

use the right punctuation

Lastly, stick to your plot and plans. Take down notes about everything. Para hindi magulo ang story.

Let me know if I helped you. Please leave a vote. Thank you and stay safe! Good luck, luv. keep writing.