scarlet's critique shop

✅ Born to love you

Author: SELEN4_IZA

Book cover:

The book cover's adorable. Hindi ko lang gusto 'yung pagkagawa mo sa title. Dapat binuo mo 'yung "you".

Title:

Hindi gano'n ka-interesting kasi medyo predictable agad or may ideas agad ako/'yung readers mo dahil sa title. And again, please use "Born to love you", 'wag mo paikliin.

Synopsis:

Edit your synopsis. Medyo magulo kasi. And describing your protagonist is already fine. 'Wag ka na maglagay ng questions na mag le-lead sa main point or main scene ng story mo.

Writing style:

I don't tend to offend you in any way, pero medyo jejemon 'yung way ng writing style mo.

Don't use too much punctuation marks. Know when to use "nang" at "ng". "rin" "din" "raw" "daw". And another thing, use quotation mark/s when your character's talking. 'wag mo rin palakihin 'yung mga words (e.g. "ANO?") pangit tignan. dapat ganito lang, "Ano?".

Narration:

Ito ang pinaka magulo. Hindi ko ma-gets 'yung ibang scene kasi ang gulo talaga ng narration. 'yung iba, narration tapos bigla naging dialogue. Hindi maayos.

Characterization:

Sa story mo, ito lang ang napansin kong maayos. Although may parts na hindi ko rin gets 'yung mga characters, pero okay naman. Pinakita 'yung mga flaws nila and/or their negative side/s. I just hope may character development.

Overall comment:

'di gano'n ka-interesting, and sobrang gulo pa talaga.

Rating:

5/10

Suggestion:

Research is the key.

Read and read. Read about the things na need mo matutunan para mapa-better 'yung story mo.

Read other stories para makakuha ka rin ng ideas para sa book mo. Pero don't steal their works, you know it's bad ^ _ ^

Lastly, stick to your plot and plans. Take down notes about everything. Para hindi magulo 'yung story.

Let me know if I helped you. Please leave a vote. Thank you and stay safe! Good luck, luv. Keep writing.