CRITIQUE 2020 [TEMPORARILY CLOSE]

Favorite Seven by miedsey

𝗧𝗜𝗧𝗟𝗘:

This may be sound so direct pero ayaw ko naman pong magsinungaling. For me, I don't really find your story title that interesting. Parang after pagkabasa ay "ah okay" lang ang magiging respond ko kasi pag binasa ang title lang, iisipin mo na may pito siyang paborito? It could be something or someone but the moment i read the story description, may disagreement po sila.

Maybe you could assess your story description and title first kasi parang magkaiba po talaga sila ng meaning?

𝗕𝗢𝗢𝗞𝗖𝗢𝗩𝗘𝗥:

Yung book cover naman po, chill lang siyang tignan, actually. Di naman po gaboong kasakit sa mata yung pagka-yellow ng title pero i would suggest that you change the font po of the "favorite seven" kasi parang naisingit na lang yung word na SEVEN doon. Doon naman po sa username niyo, okay na po yung font pero yung color naman po ang problema. If you wish to remain with the color yellow, i would propose that you choose a darker shade of yellow like mustard yellow? Pero siyempre, that is your freedom to choose. We are just here to guide you po.

𝗗𝗘𝗦𝗖𝗥𝗜𝗣𝗧𝗜𝗢𝗡:

Ito po yung issue ko okay? The title kasi is FAVORITE SEVEN so siyempre, una mo pong iisipin diyan na may specific na pitong bagay, tao, event or anything po na magrerevolve sa pitong top most favourite niya above all— for example, seven famous, seven flowers, seven fruits, seven numbers, seven brands, etc. Upon reading your description, parang nawala na po yung sense ng title ninyo kasi favorite naman po niya yung number na 7 and the main character will be searching for love in seven days. Medyo na confuse po ako doon? Please message me if i misunderstood?

Pero i would like to suggest title po:

▪︎SEVEN DAYS▪︎

▪︎A WEEK WITH YOU▪︎

▪︎LUCKY 7▪︎

▪︎WORTH TO TRY?▪︎

Pero as ive mentioned, we would respect your desicion. Pero if you would like to take it to consideration, please let us know.

𝗢𝗩𝗘𝗥𝗔𝗟𝗟:

To be honest po, maayos naman po ang story flow ninyo. Walang complications, naka focus lang siya sa main topic. Damang dama mo din ang pagka estudyante at pagiging isang anak dahil may mga scenes na talaga namang nangyayari sa totoong buhay pero, medyo hindi lang ako agree sa mga desicions ni Justina in terms of joining her friends para lang kay Seven kasi if she really values her time especially at copyreader po pala siya, dapat ay pinaprioritize niya yung mga mas importanteng bagay. Hindi po kasi porque friend mo ay lagi mong sinusunod yung mga gusto nila like sa pagpirma doon sa agreement na dapat lahat sila ay majowa si Seven, yung laging siya ang tinuturo kapag nakuha nila yung atensiyon ni Seven and other matters. If she's really an avid hater, shouldn't she be making ways to stay away from him? Nagmumukha tuloy sunud-sunuran yung main character na parang napaka dependent niya sa choices ng friends niya. Im not saying na hindi nageexist ang ganitong sitwayson but she should look fierce kasi nga diba, hater? Yes, she definitely fell in love with him and that's not the problem.

Pero still, maganda naman po ang chosen topic mo, ang chosen character awra ni Seven. Like i said earlier, maayos ang pagkakagawa mg story, walang masyadong complications and really humorous na sakto lang. Despite the mentioned concers, I must admit that we enjoyreading your story po. A chill story to read.😅

PS: miedsey, thank you for trusting our shop! I hope it somewhat helped you in any way but if you feel that we may have said something that may hurt you as a writer, please don't hesitate to message us so we could discuss about it in a very private way. Iniiwasan po kasi namin yung for example ayaw ninyo yung pag critique namin ay magpopost po kasi in any social platforms just to ruin our name, hope you understand po.