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♤ BOOK TITLE: TEXTING by __cocolate__
Blurb/cover: 6
Title: 7
Use of Language: 13
Characterization:6
Plot:16
Writing Style:15
Originality and Creativity: 6
TOTAL: 69
Review: The book is nice and gives us that sense of tragedy, your description was nice, but you can improve your work a lot better than this. I almost cried, it was really tragic, and I loved the relationship they had.
At a point, you mixed up the pronouns 'he and she' which got me really confused, you need to fix that.
Mostly, abbreviation in stories are absolutely unethical and unprofessional but due to the texting scenario, it's understandable but you need to use your abbreviation more properly.
I noticed you used 'tat' various of tines instead of 'that'. The use of 'tat' was incorrect, because 'tat ' and 'that' sound nothing alike. You should have used 'dat' or the normal word, 'that'.
Also, it is needed you work on your punctuations. I noticed that during the calling scenes, you always put a comma after each word spoken. That is also unethical. There is no need for a comma.
For example, you use ( "Hey." She said weakly, she looked worse than before.) instead of ("Hey",she said weakly. She looked worse.)
You could also have gotten rid of a lot of short short sentences by using conjunctions like and, but, or, while. You can even us the comma.
All in all, Good work on your book.
♤ BOOK TITLE: HEARTBREAK OVERRATED by sparklenightmare
Blurb/cover:7
Title: 7
Use of Language:13
Characterization:7
Plot:13
Writing Style: 15
Originality and Creativity: 6
TOTAL:68
Review: I know you wanted to make the story short, but you just skipped a whole lot of important scenes.
Your book is not bad but it needs editing and heavy restructuring. For example, I noticed you use 'you're' instead of 'your'.
Also, you just skipped to the end. You could have explained it a bit more. You just did a heavy time skip which made the reason for reading the story purposeless. No details, make the book a waste of time.
I'm sorry, but you need restructuring. Good job still
♤ BOOK TITLE: THE ENCOUNTER by bookishh21
Blurb/cover:8
Title: 6
Use of Language: 15
Characterization: 5
Plot: 18
Writing Style: 13
Originality and Creativity:7
TOTAL:72
REVIEW: Your book is really weird, in a good and bad way. I really don't have much to say, but it's unrealistic and needs more description.
The girl was asked never to go to the basement but she just went there without hesitation. You need to re-edit it though. All in all, good book.
♤ BOOK TITLE: THE SCOOP by NemurenaiYume
Blurb/cover:6
Title: 7
Use of Language:18
Characterization: 6
Plot: 15
Writing Style: 15
Originality and Creativity: 6
TOTAL: 73
Review: Great work. I really don't have much to say but it's a good piece and could use a bit more editing. Good work once again.
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