This is first time, I'm writing a story. Though, I have been a silent reader.
Strictly no hate comments but I would definitely appreciate constructive criticism and suggestions.
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Story in Hinglish..!! (*Hindi dialogues, written in English*)
Thi...
Rajmata: Beta, aap ki ser mein dard nahi hai na? (She nods no. Unjay & Jay hug her. Brij-Giri talk for sometime. Everyone leave ManVeer for some privacy. He silently looks at her. She tries to catch his finger. He gives some water to drink.)
Manyata: (barely audible) Hume sab kuch yaad aa gaya hai, Uday. (snaps his head) Sach mein. (He hugs her little.)
Uday: Princess aap ko rest karna chahiye.. (she looks at him, hopefully) Hum Jay ya Unnati ko bejte hai.
(He moves out and informs everyone that she remembers everything. Everyone get happy and Jay plans for a party after the discharge. Manyata get discharged, the very next evening. Unay come to Manyata's room the night.)
Unnati: Hey Manyata.. (changes the expression as she wipes her tears.) Kya hua tum kyu ro rahi ho? (Manyata tells Uday's behaviour in hospital)
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Jay: Jiji.. jab aap behosh thi na tab humne Uday ko pehle baar rote hue dekha tha. (M shocked.) Shayad woh aap ke health ko leke thoda pareshaan ho raha hoga. You know na he loves you so much. Don't worry kal tak theek ho jayega. (They look on.) Hume toh kal designers se meeting hai aap ke wedding lehenga ke liye. (The trio talk and Manyata sleeps in Jay's lap. They both plan to get them together.)
(Next afternoon, Jay takes Manyata to shopping, Unnati brings Uday for lunch at restaurant. Jay takes Manyata to same place.)
Manyata: Jay.. Tumhare dost kab aa rahe hai? Mujhe medicines bhi lena hoga, lunch ke baad. (Jay keeps looking around for Unnati. She gets signal to come at a table.)
Jay: Jiji hum us table per chalte hai na. Wahan pe achcha hai. (They sit there while Unnati takes Uday to same table telling that it's her friends.) Hi Uday, Hi Unnati. (Manyata snaps from menu card that its Udnati, looks shockingly.)
Unnati: Ab aap dono apna problem sort out karke aa jaana. (leaves with Jay)
Uday: (sit silently) Toh tumhe kya khaana hai? Decide fast. (Manyata feels bad as his tone is cold.)
Manyata: Uday kya hua hai? Please mujh se baat karo jo bhi hai mil kar sort karenge. (he avoids her) please main tumhe aise gussa nahi dekh sakthi (still avoiding) Kya tum iss liye gussa ho kyun ki main us din Aakash se milne akeli chali gayi..?? (snaps his head) Maine socha ki aap logo Aakash waise hi pasand nahi aata. Main us se sab kuch sulah karke aa jaongi. Maine socha ki us se aakhiri baar milne chali jaongi. Mujhe kya pata tha ki wahan yeh sab ho jayega??
Uday: Tumhe hamesha apni kyu chalani hoti hai? Jab hum kuch kehte hai woh sab sun liya karo. Agar Vj banna ne tumhare watch mein woh GPS tracker device install nahi kiya toh.. whatever.. hume pehle yeh promise karo ki hum se, tum kabhi bhi jo bhi baat ho, bada ya chotta sab kuch bataogi.
Manyata: (almost cries) I'm sorry.. I promise.. ek minute tumhe pehle se pata tha Aakash ke baare mein. (he nods) Tum ne mujhe yeh sab batana important nahi samjha? (about to stand, he catches her wrist)
Uday: Hume Aakash ke baare mein doubt tab hua jab hum holi ke din pahad pe lad rahe the. Baad mein humne Aakash ke Mom ko kisi aur ke saath dekha tha. Wo unke original family hai. Tab se hum, Chotti aur Vj Banna Aakash aur uski original identity ke investigate karne mein lag gaye. Phir hum ne Jagat ka help liya aur us ne humari bahut madad ki. Un logo ne Jay ko blackmail kiya ki woh tumhe maar de warna kuch illegal business mein humara involvement hone ki proof woh police ko dikhaake humare reputation ko barbaad kar denge. Jay bahut dar gayi thi aur depression mein chali gayi kyun ki wo apne aap ko bahut akela feel kar rahi thi. Jay ne saare evidences ikkatta kiya akele mein.. (she looks shocked) Phir baad ki kahani tum toh jaanti ho.. (she nods) Ab hume ghar jaana chahiye, bahut late ho gaya hai.
(In Car, she sits silently lost in thoughts while he glances at her frequently. Manyata sits all lost whole day. Unay get worried as she asks to be left alone in her room.)
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Sorry for the short update..!!
In dono ki problem kya hai.. Jab dekho tab ladte rehte hai..!! Ufff..
When will Manyata propose Uday? I'm waiting... (*tapping the floor being desperate*)
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