Before I say anything about your book I want to remind you that these are just suggestions! I am by no means a professional:) I am sorry if I was a little harsh, it was not mean to hurt you in any way! okay let's get to it!
book cover: 9/10 I like your cover but since it uses dark colors it's almost hard to see.
grammar:8/10 you used periods way to much, replace them with commas or semi colons!
characters:7/10. you're characters weren't described enough.
descriptions:8/10 you did do good on descriptions but you could do better by describing the characters a little better.
real life situation?:8/10 it would be pretty rare to happen but that's okay! it doesn't have to relate to real life
cliche?: 10/10
final: 50/60
final review:
your book needs spacing! maybe after every paragraph put a space:) like I have already said, you used periods to much which makes the story seem really choppy and almost robotic. your book jumps around from place to place and it makes it almost confusing. some parts of your book confused me. you need to update!! that's how you keep readers:) you jump times a lot and I wouldn't advise doing that because that can confuse people. I think you're doing a great job, keep it up! horror books are one of the hardest to write, you're doing great:)
Just another reminder: THESE ARE JUST SUGGESTIONS, YOU DO NOT HAVE TO USE THEM!! IM NO PROFESSIONAL:)
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