Before I say anything about your book I want to remind you that these are just suggestions! I am by no means a professional:) I am sorry if I was a little harsh, it was not mean to hurt you in any way! okay let's get to it!
book cover:7/10 I didn't think the cover went with the book.
grammar:5/10 you had quite a few errors. I'm not sure if English is your language so don't get mad:) I can help with your grammar if you would like.
characters: 6/10 I didn't get to know much about your chargers as I would've liked to.
descriptions:5/10 it needed a lot more descriptions.
real life situation?:10/01
cliche?:8/10 it was in some ways cliche.
Total: 41/60
final review:
your spacing needs some work. I didn't understand the prologue. I was confused of why it had **** under every paragraph. the chapters were very short and they didn't have much happening in them. In the second chapter you said "as my English class came to an end. As I was walking..." it would be better to say "As my English class ended I walked to my locker" or something like that. you also didn't need to include what person you were writing the chapter in; in the second chapter you wrote: "it's written in 1st POV, that is not needed. when you wrote dialogue you should keep it in one paragraph. I didn't have much to judge off of so that's all I have for you! I would advise you to keep updating because that's how you keep readers! I would also advise to make your chapters longer!
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