oc rater [warrior cats]

honeycloud

name || Honeycloud
Past names: Ginger, Silentkit, Silentpaw, Silentwish, Honeycloud
Name reasoning: Honey-Her ginger and white fur, and her soft and sweet honey-like personality; Cloud-Her warm and kind personality and her white bits of fur
everything looks good here! i think that 'honey' is a rather common prefix, something you don't see often! and so is the suffix 'cloud'. overall, it all looks good!

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gender || Female
alright!

rank || Medicine cat
Past ranks: Rogue, kit, medicine cat apprentice
ooh, okay! haven't rated a medicine cat yet!

clan || ThunderClan
mhm!

appearance || Honeycloud is a white she-cat with ginger patches. She has medium-length fur and is slightly fluffy. Honeycloud is thin, but it does not show under her fur. She is slender. She has soft, warm emerald eyes. She has a long scar on her throat that is hardly visible, also many other hardly visible scars on her face and pelt.
she sounds pretty, and definitely realistic!

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personality || She is shy, soft, and warm. Honeycloud is emotional and long-tempered. She is often unsure, but is usually determined about her roles. She is satisfied with her life, but often feels left out and hurt. She wishes to know what it feels like to be a warrior. Honeycloud is loyal, but she is confused. She can be overprotective and stubborn, also dramatic and sassy.
she has a good amount of balance in her personality! however, i think there are a couple parts that is contradicting each other. for example, her being sassy kind of contradicts the soft part, and in my opinion so is the shy and dramatic bit, simply because if you're dramatic everyone's attention will most likely be on you. but other than that, it seems good!

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family || Unknown mother and father
Mate: Duskstar-a light brown-beige colored tom with dark golden eyes.
Kits: Honeyleaf-a ginger and white patched beautiful she-cat with bright blue eyes
Other unnamed kits
i'd prefer if you put the pelt colors of the parents, simply so i can see if the genetics match! but honeycloud and honeyleaf's genetics seem to be pretty good, perhaps honeyleaf got her blue eyes from a grandparent!

i am curious, though, was honeyleaf named before or after honeycloud changed her name from silentwish? were they both named 'honey' in representing something?

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likes || Healing cats, daydreaming, spending time with Duskstar, sunning, making new friends, talking with her kits (she doesn't talk but her kits do)
okay! i can get that from her personality!

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dislikes || Cats treating her kits harshly, cats disrespecting her because she can't speak, her not being able to save cats, and war, bloodshed, nightmares and seizures
mhm, all looks good, i'd say!

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backstory || Honey, or Ginger, was born rogue. Her parents were unknown and she was treated harshly by her group. She ran away as a young kit, but in the process, she was almost killed. She gained numerous scars, and her throat was slit slightly badly. Thankfully, a ThunderClan apprentice found her and rescued her while taking a walk. He took her to ThunderClan, where she miraculously survived. She was fine and healthy, but she lost her voice due to the wound in her throat and was never able to speak again. Ginger, because she wasn't able to say her name out loud, was renamed Silentkit for her being mute. She kept having nightmares and had seizures, but still became an apprentice. In her warrior apprentice ceremony, she passed out, and the leader finally decided she needed to be a medicine cat apprentice because there was no other way for her. She did, and it was horrible because of the ill-tempered medicine cat's harsh ways of teaching, but she went it through with the help of Duskpaw, the cat who had rescued her.
interesting backstory so far! i do have a question, though; is the medicine cat's ways of teaching only so ill-tempered because it was silentpaw who was her apprentice? just curious!

They became close friends, and Silentpaw, admiring the tom very much, relied on him heavily. She soon became a full medicine cat and the past one died, but she still had nightmares and seizures, also visions. Silentwish realized it was some kind of future thingy, and expressed it to Duskpaw, and he understood. They tried to convince other cats that trouble was coming their way, but no cat believed them. Trouble did come, and the next leader, who was evil, ruled the clan harshly. The new leader led an attack towards ShadowClan, but lost, making her weak.
hmm, that's intriguing! i'm a tad confused, however, is the harsh-ruling leader different from the one who attacked shadowclan? or were they both the same cat?

It was Silentwish's job to take care of the clan, but also to heal. She did not know whether to heal the new leader or kill her. By Duskpaw, now Duskheart's persuasion, she fed the leader deathberries. Now ThunderClan was left without any cat to rule because the deputy also died.
did the deputy die from war in shadowclan or something smaller? and not sure if you were trying to indicate this, but i think it'd be interesting if after the deputy died, the evil leader refused to replace him.

 Silentwish named Duskheart leader, and ThunderClan cats and StarClan cats all approved of her choice. Duskstar renamed Silentwish as Honeycloud, and for years, peace came. Duskstar and Honeycloud became closer and closer, and they began to fall in love. Honeycloud trained an apprentice who became a medicine cat quickly and her had kits, and told ThunderClan for her kits. It was viewed badly, but most cats showed sympathy and happiness to her. Her kits were treated badly, though. After her kits became apprentices, Honeycloud passed away, trying to stop the argument between two cats.
hmm, interesting! i'm a little curious about the argument, though. did honeycloud pass away to  stop the argument, or did she die during out of stress or something?

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final rating || 10.5/12 [included bonus points]

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honeycloud's a pretty good oc! she's definitely well-developed; i'd just say touch up a little bit on the personality and backstory, but that's it! thanks for letting me rate her!