oc rater [warrior cats]

icepaw

name || Icepaw
reasoning || white patches
great name!

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 gender || Tom
mhm!

 rank || Warrior apprentice 
alright!

 clan || SparrowClan, a clan located in a territory full of brooks, streams, and creeks, a clan that is known to hunt birds and some bunnys here and there, there clan is also known to be enemies of Shoreclan and allies with Mapleclan.
great fanclan!

 appearance || defined, polydactyl, lilac tabby color point cat. They have a white muzzle, chest, belly, and paws, and have long, clean fur which smells like pine nettles. They have a few scars here and there. They have small blue eyes.
they sound very pretty & realistic! not much to say here!

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 personality || Warm and considerate, but are also uptight, they try to think things through more than just leap into a fight, they tend to have different personalities when it comes to the cat there talking to.
i think that they could have some more negative traits, plus i think there are some contradictions! 'uptight' is a bit controlling, but at the same time they're warm and considerate? i do think that the uptight and thinking things through works well together, though. but i'd still add some more negative traits.

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 family || Mom- Daffodilblaze Dad- Asphodelripple sister- Asterstep brother- Pistachiofrost
they sound very nice, but i do need their appearances, as that's what i'm rating.

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 likes || cold weather, love to eat crow
mhm!

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Dislikes || The smell of grass
oki!

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 backstory || when Icepaw was younger their clan often fought over a stretch of territory with a bordering clan, and has led to many losses close to Icepaw. One of them almost killing him but instead killing his mother, causing him to start being more patient and think things threw.
there's nothing wrong with this backstory. i just think it can use more details. of course, if you're not making a book circling him, that's completely understandable & details won't need to be as hashed out, but there should still be some details. for example, what's his relationship like with his family? after his mother died, how did his father, brother, and sister react? was he close to his mother? did her death affect him, and i think especially focus on if he felt any guilt, because from what i can tell it seems as if his mother stepped in to save him. friends? mentor? stuff like that!

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final rating || 8/12 [included bonus points]

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hey! thanks for letting me rate icepaw - sorry that it took so long!