oc rater [warrior cats]

flyhop

name || Flyhop
past names || Flykit, Flypaw
name reasoning || Fly - because she was named in Flightclan - Hop - because of her goofy personality
ooh, very pretty! i quite like that name, it's very cool!

[1/1]

gender || Male
okay!

rank || Loner
past ranks || Kit, Apprentice, warrior, senior warrior, deputy
ooh, a loner! interesting!

current clan || None
previous clan || Flightclan(I gave u imformation about this clan in Kestrelmoss's form)
mhm! interested as to why he left, though! oh well, guess i'll have to wait 'til the backstory!

appearance || Very very light gray tabby tom, with a long hideous scar across his front left leg, One crystal blue eye and one hazel brown eye.
that's very cool! i've rarely seen cats with different eyes before!! and the fur color does make sense, as i believe normally cats with different colored eyes are lighter, as most of them are white-furred!

[2/2]

personality || Goofy, comforting, not the best hunter
pretty cool personality! i'd suggest adding some more flaws, though, because 'not the best hunter' isn't really a personality trait. perhaps flyhop's impulsive? maybe he jumps too soon when he's hunting, which is why he's not the best? something like that! otherwise, looks pretty good!

[3/4]

family || Mother - Mistwing - Gray she-cat hazel eyes
Father - Doe - Brown tabby tom with blue eyes
Sister - Haildawn - Brownish white she-cat blue eyes
Brother - Honey claw - Dark ginger tom with blue eyes
Mate - Bailey - Black tortoiseshell she-cat with bright bright blue eyes
Kits - Harley - Gray tortoiseshell she-cat with hazel eyes
mhm! i believe flyhop's genetically possible!

[1/1]

cause of death || Died with his family by green cough (By his family i mean mate and kit and Haildawn, they are the only ones who came with her)
oki!

backstory || Flykit always wanted to be a warrior, not knowing how hard it was. Flykit soon became Flypaw and was apprenticed to Sootwhisker. Sootwhisker trained and cared for Flypaw as if he was his own. Flypaw soon became Flyhop.
curious, you put 'not knowing how hard it was' at the beginning. did flyhop experience any troubles or overcome anything?

One day when Flyhop was on his own border patrol he ran into Bailey, he soon began coming to Bailey daily, visiting her as often as he could. When Flyhop became deputy, he knew he would have to pick one... Clan or Bailey...
interesting! did flyhop try inviting bailey to join flightclan or ask flightstar if bailey could join? if he's having trouble picking i think that's something he'd try to do, and try to get both!

A couple moons have passed and Flyhop chose...'Bailey'. He told Flightstar (They were the deputy in Kestrelmoss's form, but when Flyhop wanted to leave Flightstar became leader after Skystar's death) that he wanted to leave and join his new mate outside of the clan. Ao he did just that. Flightstar may have agreed he wasn't happy about it. Flyhop soon figured out that Haildawn wanted to join him, he aloud her of course. Soon after he left the clans for Bailey, Bailey gave birth to Harley. Thy end:)
neat backstory! i'd suggest adding a tad more details, though, mainly on flyhop's decision! if he had trouble choosing, then i can't really imagine how he'd wake up one morning and suddenly realize his decision would be to go with bailey. perhaps something should've "shown him the way", a sign that helped him make up his decision?

[1.5/2]

final rating || 8.5/10

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thanks for letting me rate flyhop! hope this helped!