oc rater [warrior cats]

apricotwish

name || Apricotwish
name reasoning || because of their chocolate molted pelt
i love that name!

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 gender || Female
alrighty!

 rank || Deputy
ooh, i like this! most oc's are warriors or leaders!

 clan || Shoreclan - a clan located in an acrid shrubland. They love hunting, and strongly dislike clouds. Their favorite thing to eat is snake. They are wily and balanced, but are also blunt.
shoreclan sounds like such a nice fanclan!!

 appearance || Apricotwish is a defined, bushy tailed, chocolate mottled cat. They have a white muzzle, chest, belly, and paws, and have medium-long, messy fur which smells like mushrooms. They have a nick in an ear. Apricotwish has close-set yellow eyes.
very nice! i think that appearances are quite realistic!! plus, i love how you added the scent!

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 personality || weak, pretty slow, very determined, loves to hunt, smart, thoughtful, loves to try new things, and tries to forgive and forget, they love to try and make new friendships with clanmates and even cats from other clans at gatherings, sometimes tends to question there loyalty to Shoreclan but tries to stick to the beliefs in Shoreclan.
pretty solid personality! however i'd suggest adding some more negative traits, as weak and slow aren't really personality traits. perhaps, for example, they're a little impulsive, since they loves to try new things? maybe sometimes they don't even think about the thing they're doing before they're trying it? something like that!

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 likes || hunting, and climbing trees
looks good!

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dislikes || Fighting cats, clouds, rain
mhm!

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 Family || Mother: Omenstrike - White she-cat with light yellow eyes, short furred
Father: Pumastorm - Tan tom, long furred, yellow eyes, small white speckles
Brother: Falconclaw - tan tom, short furred, yellow eyes, darker brown stripes
i think that apricotwish is genetically possible! the only thing i'd suggest making their father's pelt color a little darker - a light brown, maybe? but that's just the tiniest detail, it all looks good!

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 backstory || Apricotkit never really knew her father as he died in a clan battle, and never really talked to her brother because he was a apprentice by the time she was born.
did they ever wish that she knew her father? did they ever wish that they spoke to their brother more? what's their relationship with their mother like? did their mother tell them a lot about their father? considering that they're the only kit of the litter (it seems), were they lonely, or did they make other friends?

When Apricotkit became Apricotpaw her mentor was a cat called Thistlebrook, who was a very strict but fun fluffy brown tom. In a clan battle against Mapleclan, Apricotpaw had to witness a cat called Oliveseed fall in the gorge, and once Apricotpaw became Apricotwish she always avoided being near the gorge fearing the same death.
i'm not sure if i'm interpreting this right, but apricotpaw only had the fear after she become a warrior? is there a specific reasoning for that?

Apricotwish became deputy after training two apprentices, Foggrove and Cedarleap. since she became deputy she started having a crush on her leader Silverstar.
interesting! i am curious, though, is silverstar like a friend of her's, or did they just start having a crush on the leader?

backstory has a pretty nice base! however, i'd suggest that you add some more details/events. for example, her father died in a battle. perhaps that battle was with mapleclan, and so battles with mapleclan happen throughout the story rather than just that one time? also, i'd recommend you add some more development with silverstar during the backstory, rather than just suddenly having apricotwish have a crush on her. but it looks pretty nice!

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final rating || 9/12 [included bonus points]

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thank you for letting me rate apricotwish!! they're a pretty cool oc!