oc rater [warrior cats]

bluebellstar

name || Bluebellstar (Formerly Bluebellrain, named so because she was her father had brought a Bluebell as a present for her mother and rain because the leader was lazy and bored, it was raining when she was made a full assassin and they chose rain.)
oh, okay! very neat, plus pretty!

[1/1]

 gender || Female 
okay!

 rank || Leader, Formerly Assassin (Works under the leader command, picked at birth, born and raised to kill)
nice! the assassin bit is cool, but i feel like it's been a while since i've seen a leader oc :)

 clan || Hawthornclan (The Mistrusting and Skillful, They live in the dense Taiga. Known for being mistrustful of others, reason why they have assassins. Borders PhosphorClan-The Bright and Cheerful-and AlgorClan-The Wise and Distant.)
very cool fanclans!!

 appearance || Dark mahogany fur that blends in well with the Taiga forest. She has little to no fluff, and is lithe and small. She has unusually large teeth, and has eerily red eyes. She has only a stub for a tail, from one mission.
cool! i don't really know how realistic red eyes are, though, i think if cats get red eyes, they're normally sick. but i did find a combination of cats with dark brown fur and dark orange eyes, which is perhaps what you meant, so orange that it seemed red? not sure, feel free to correct me! other than that, she sounds very nice!!

[1.5/2]

 personality || She has been forced into showing no emotion often, but when she does, she's a aggressive person who has very little loyalty. She will eventually betray anyone for a better thing, or for her own personal gain. She is a bold cat though, who is unafraid to speak her mind. She has more talent in killing than in anything else, so she doesn't understand social cues, she normally watches more than interacts, and most cats avoid her anyway.
woah, cool personality!! i can tell this is going to set for a very interesting oc! however, i feel like she needs to be a tad more balanced. perhaps she could have a soft spot for like, i don't know, flowers or something. something like that to balance it out a little bit!

[3/4]

 family || Mother- Darnerwish- Dark Mahogany with white paws and green eyes
 Father- Monsoonjaw- Brown with redish-brown eyes
 Sister- Columbidaeflight- Brown with green eyes and white muzzle
nice! seems realistic!

[1/1]

backstory || Born in Hawthornclan she was pulled away to start training in the ways of stealth and fighting from an early age.
was she specifically chosen, or was this done to every kit?

She wasn't immediatly taught to fight, as she couldn't walk or talk. But once she was of ready age, she started to train. She wasn't a prodigy or a natural, so it took many moons for her to learn. But when she was ready she became a killing machine.
very cool! just wondering, did anything motivate her, since she didn't seem to have the talent for it?

She went on many missions for the leader of Hawthornclan, Flytrapstar and lost her tail in a mission to kill Luminescentflight, the medicine cat of Algorclan. After a while, she grew to hate her life in the clan, a quiet shadow off somewhere alone.
why? was it that she didn't like killing cats, or was it the emotion thing?

So she did what anyone would do, wait till Flytrapstar was on their last life, murder them along with their deputy, and assume the role as leader. She rules the clan with an iron (fist? paw?) and answers to nobody. There have been many assassination attempts, but they have all fallen short due to her disposal of her own assassins, and her assassin background. She has no mate or kits, and hates the idea of having one.
very neat backstory!! i think it's pretty interesting; the only thing i'd say is that some more details could've been added, as i was slightly confused on some things. just some details to hash out!

[1.5/2]

final rating || 8/10

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thanks for letting me rate bluebellstar!! i think that she's pretty well thought-out, and i've really enjoyed looking through her form! thanks again!