oc rater [warrior cats]

spotfire

name || Spotfire
past names || Spotkit, Spotpaw
name reason || Spot- For her patches - Fire - For her ginger patches/tortoiseshell markings
love the name! plus, really adore the 'fire' suffix!

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gender || Nonbinary, He/she/they
alrighty!

rank || Loner
past ranks || Kit, Apprentice, Warrior, queen, senior warrior, Deputy
deputy! that's interesting!

former clan || Oakclan - Mountainy terrained territory with tonssss of trees
ooh, very cool!

appearance || Black Tom/she with ginger patches/tortoiseshell markings, Amber eyes, a small nose scar and shoulder scar
they sound really cool! although, i do believe that most cats with any bit of ginger normally have green eyes. but amber eyes are certainly possible!

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personality || Selfish, Snarky, bossy, aggressive, doesn't have a lot of friends
hmm, okay! this is a little unrelated, but is there a reason why he acts like this? i think that unless there's a background reasoning, like an experience happening at a young age that engraved this into her personality, it's a little unrealistic that they'd be born like this!

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family || Mother - Blackfur - Black she-cat, brown eyes
Father - Ghoststar - White tortoiseshell, Hazel eyes
Mate - Patchfur - Ginger tom with bright crystal blue eyes, he is in Flightclan
Kits - Honeypaw - Black she-cat with Sea blue eyes
uhhh i don't really think a white tortoiseshell is a type of cat. other than that looks good!

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likes || Hunting, fighting other clan cats, winning battles, going into other cats territory, K*lling clan and kittypets
okay. interesting...

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dislikes || Losing battles, Kittens, kittypets, Clan cats 
can definitely see that from the personality!

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backstory || Spotkit has always felt different, the way he hated other cats? That wasn't normal for a clan cat.
hmm, interesting! although, i have the same question as the personality bit; is there a reason why spotkit feels this way? i understand their personality, but i feel it'd be more realistic if some sort of event happened that made her personality and view of other cats turn into such.

Spotkit soon turned to Spotpaw under the mentor Bluesong. Bluesong was a bossy blue she-cat. Spotpaw grew annoyed of her attitude. And did something about it. She waited till Bluesong was alone, and sneak attacked her and k*lled her.
that escalated quickly lmfao. but again, same thing as the bit on top. personally i think it's impossible for a cat to be born evil and have a thirst to kill others, no matter the personality. also, isn't spotpaw only an apprentice, whereas bluesong's a warrior? i imagine bluesong should've easily been able to overpower her apprentice?

Spotpaw was shocked at what she did, confused and upset but soon grew happy about her achievement! Spotpaw became Spotfire soon after Bluesong's 'mysterious' death. Spotfire became mates with Patchfur from Flightclan (They started having feelings for each other at gatherings), and Spotfire gave birth to Honeykit, Honeykit was raised by other queens because Spotfire doesn't like children.
interesting! i do have a question, though; doesn't spotfire hate other cats? i thought that was how he was born?

She became deputy and tried to kill her father Ghoststar because she wanted to be leader! She ended up taking Ghoststar's 3rd life, but was exiled, and became a rouge, and figured out that the only cat she was scared to run into was Patchfur and Honeypaw.
oh, okay! am curious, did spotfire go a little crazy at the end? i'm kind of picking up that vibe; and if so, what made them go crazy? if not, though, i assume that she knows she can't become leader even if she kills the leader, because he'll need to be deputy first? i'm just a little lost on all of this.

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final rating || 9/12 [included bonus points]

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hey! thanks for letting me rate spotfire!

i'd suggest working on the backstory. i just find it unlikely a cat would do spotfire's actions without something happening to them that caused them to do that, so i'd suggest adding something like that in.

hope this helped!