oc rater [warrior cats]

raven shadow

name || Raven Shadow (reason: black fur, and hides well in shadows.)
(Past names: Raven)
cool! i like the suffix 'shadow', haven't seen that a lot i feel like!

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gender || tom
nice!

rank || Senior warrior (claw)
mhm!

clan || Group of the Forest, in short Forest's group. It is a rogue group who operates in Clan way. Founder was Crafty, once a house cat. Other groups in the area: Group of the River Side, in short River Side's group.
Ranks in order: Overseer (leader), helper ,(deputy), Healer's (medicine cat), senior warriors (claws), (warriors (storm-claws), young warriors (New-claws), apprentices (learners,), kits (kittens), queens (mother's), elders (senior cats).
cool!! kinda reminds me of dawn of the clans :]

appearance || Short, black tom with yellow eyes and long, bushy tail. He has long, shiny claws and a glossy pelt. Short legs and paws.
sounds pretty realistic to me! the only thing i'd say is that if he has short legs & small paws, i'm not sure if his claws would be particularly long. but i'm not sure, just kind of going off my own head here!

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personality || hadn't thought of one yet, but I am thinking of making him fierce and loyal. I also am thinking of him liking to hunt and blend in with the shadows so he can stalk River Side's border. He does sometimes get caught though.
sounds like a pretty good start! only thing, i'd throw in some negative traits as well, as both fierce & loyal are pretty positive in my opinion. like maybe he has a short temper or likes being with himself, something like that to balance it out!

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backstory || Born to Dawn Cloud and Thunder Roar as Raven along side Gray, and Leaf. Raven liked to listen to stories that the senior cats tell. Raven also likes to play moss ball in his kit stages. When he was apprenticed, Raven had Sage Storm as a mentor. Sage Storm taught Raven a lot of stuff, but then a devastating battle broke out between the two groups. Raven fought along side his mentor, he lived but his mentor died. Raven grieved his mentors death a lot and couldn't pass on his death. He was given a new mentor, Running River. Running River taught him lots more stuff but it wasn't the same as Sage Storm.
pretty interesting so far!! i like that you put how running river just didn't have the same feel as sage storm, though i'd comment a bit on whether or not raven & running river had any "bad blood", per say. like did raven ever give running river a hard time? did he ever say anything like, "oh, sage storm would've done this instead-"? stuff like that. i feel like probably not as extreme if you want raven to be more of a polite cat, but maybe add that like raven's pretty cold towards running river or something.

Then one night Star Spring gave Raven and his brother a hunting task together so they could test their teamwork. Leaf wasn't feeling good so she didn't join. They successfully showed Star Spring that they could do teamwork and was given a week off break. Raven was so happy.
did he do anything eventful during that week, or just chill?

 A week later, he began training again. He was about... 11 moons.. dunno though. Raven has successfully passed the test and so did his siblings. He was given the name of Raven Shadow. Raven Shadow worked as a young warrior providing food and care for his Clan. Whenever the leader tells him to do something, he does that. So when Leaf Spots died of wounds given by a River Side cat, Raven Shadow didn't listen too the overseers orders.
i totally get how raven shadow would be grieving for his sister's death, but if he listened and did whatever the leader told him to before, it's just kind of odd to me that he would suddenly stop? like i just don't understand the connection between sister's death and disobeying orders, if that makes sense?

The overseer understood that Raven Shadow was still devastated by Leaf Spots death. He became a storm-claw early and did more of a Storm-claw stuff.
i like how there's different ranks between younger warrior and senior warrior!

Went to the first gathering in a while, talked to some River Side cats and listening on the news. It was till Dusty was born he liked to watch Dusty play in the clearing with his half-brother watching, Ebony Shadow.
okay! totally get that you couldn't think of more, but i think this is pretty good. a very nice backstory! i'm just wondering though, if he had half-siblings, did one of his parents die? like what happened there?

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family || Mother- Dawn Cloud (black she-cat with yellow eyes, short glossy fur. Deceased, killed by River Side cat in battle)
Father - Thunder Roar (gray tom with short paws and legs. Long, shiny claws and a bushy tail. He has copper eyes)
Siblings- Gray leaf (gray tom with copper eyes and a short tail, alive),
Leaf Spots (gray she-cat with black patches and green eyes, deceased.)
Half siblings- Dusty (White she-cat with specks of dark gray on her pelt and green eyes),
Ebony Shadow (Black tom with brown eyes)
genetics look good to me!

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likes || Blending into the shadows, hunting, his siblings, moss-ball, and listening to stories.
yup! can totally see that from his backstory, which is nice!!

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dislikes || River Side's Group, death, thunderstorms and two-legs.
mhm!

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final rating || 9/12 [included bonus points]

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thanks for letting me rate raven shadow!! great oc!