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જ Illusion of love જ ☾Cait☽

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Reviewer: Caitrw
Title: Illusion of love
Author: ShuKurenai2009

Title: 5/5

The title fit perfectly with the plot, the story really showed an illusion of love throughout it.

Blurb: 3/5
Although the blurb describes what the book is about, it lacks description however. I love how you included the triggers though.

Plot/flow of the story: 10/20
The plot stood strong throughout the entire story and remained consistent with adding to their failing marriage. However, it lacked descriptions of everything in the book from the characters to the world building. When it comes to the pace, the story moved too fast and was choppy where it was jumping around a lot in a way.

Character development: 4/5
The characters development was strong and they changed a lot over the chapters which shows throughout the story.

Grammar: 3/5
The grammar was off throughout the entire book, there were words missing in the sentences which made the sentences choppy as well as misspelled words. The sentences were also choppy because of the ways that they were phrased. There were a lot of ellipses (...) when they were not needed.

Readers enjoyment: 3/5
Overall I enjoyed the story and the plot is very intriguing. However, it was hard to read and stay focused since it was choppy and too fast of movement where I felt lost as well as the lack of descriptions.

Total: 28/45

Review:
Overall, this book was not bad and has a lot of potential. The plot is strong and really interesting which adding the descriptions and slowing it down by adding more to a scene will really build upon it. When it comes to the ellipsis (...) I would either add a comma or a period instead of using it so much. Also be careful with the p.o.v switches because sometimes I was lost with who p.o.v I was reading from. However, I did enjoy this book and as I said priorly it has a lot of potential!